Beautiful voices
that lovingly pleased these ears
once, no longer sing.
that lovingly pleased these ears
once, no longer sing.
corallee
Great job; a short poem, but a strong one nonetheless. I absolutely loved the "that lovingly pleased these ears" line.
EiriasGood poem, but I feel like you could make the message clearer. . . the fact that "once" is on the last line makes it seem almost as if you just wrote the 17 syllables in a straight line and then broke it up on the sheer basis of syllables. (It also doesn't help that the picture messes up the formatting).
Haikus are your gift. Well, poetry in general is your gift, but I just adore your haikus. They say so much with just a few words! This one is simply enthralling. 5/5
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