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Beautiful voices
that lovingly pleased these ears
once, no longer sing.



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corallee This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 24, 2012 at 12:17 pm:
Great job; a short poem, but a strong one nonetheless. I absolutely loved the "that lovingly pleased these ears" line. 
 
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Eirias said...
Jun. 10, 2012 at 9:39 pm:
Good poem, but I feel like you could make the message clearer. . . the fact that "once" is on the last line makes it seem almost as if you just wrote the 17 syllables in a straight line and then broke it up on the sheer basis of syllables. (It also doesn't help that the picture messes up the formatting).
 
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Inksy said...
May 20, 2012 at 9:13 pm:
Haikus are your gift. Well, poetry in general is your gift, but I just adore your haikus. They say so much with just a few words! This one is simply enthralling. 5/5
 
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