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time flies, with all the
lies, that come and go, at their
owners' clear leisure




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Swiminaway said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 6:01 pm:
few words, but straight and clear to the point. i like it:)
 
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sany.lastflameThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 5:19 pm:
I love this poem! It does feel like its missing something. If I were you, I would change the second line and use some different, more powerful word choice that really draws the reader in, like the very last line!
 
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Fabala_G said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 4:02 pm:
I like the internal rhyme! Good job!
 
meals100 replied...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 4:06 pm :
thanks! (:
 
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browneyez16 said...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 2:54 pm:
I like it. Not everyone can pull a haiku off...
 
meals100 replied...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 3:41 pm :
thank you!(:
 
browneyez16 replied...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 3:45 pm :
If you get a moment you shoul check out some of my stuff.... :)
 
browneyez16 replied...
Jan. 8, 2012 at 4:25 pm :
You're awsome meals...write more!!!
 
meals100 replied...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 5:56 pm :
thank you! i'm working on a sort story that will be done in couple weeks!
 
meals100 replied...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 5:57 pm :
*short story
 
browneyez16 replied...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 6:58 pm :
Well...let me know when it is and I'll read it! :)
 
meals100 replied...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 4:24 pm :
okay! it is about sibling rivalry... likestepbrothers but more serious and about sisters! it is kinda based on me and my sister and our relationship :P
 
meals100 replied...
Jan. 11, 2012 at 4:24 pm :
okay! it is about sibling rivalry... like stepbrothers but more serious and about sisters! it is kinda based on me and my sister and our relationship :P
 
browneyez16 replied...
Jan. 14, 2012 at 10:11 pm :
I'll try and read it sometime this weekend...sounds great!! :)
 
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