On the Edge

July 17, 2011
By poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh


I sat on the edge
of falling, dying, or life.
I took the right path.



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Rayne GOLD said...
on Dec. 4 2011 at 1:37 pm
Rayne GOLD, Chippewa Falls, Wisconsin
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Makes me wonder what path was the right one....... Good!

on Nov. 28 2011 at 8:45 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh

I don't know why it posted the same thing 2x!

on Nov. 28 2011 at 8:44 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Originally I meant it to be like this: Warning, it may take sometime! Well, anyway, falling = getting hurt in any way, physical or mentally etc. dying = dying in any context, actually or metaphorically, and life = living, just LIVING it up (ha ha ha ;) )!!!! When I say qt. "I took the right path" I could have taken any mixture of these three. So, whatever one dose is right to you at that moment!

(I should have just listed this in the 'notes' when I first posted the poem!)

Thanks for your patience!


on Nov. 28 2011 at 8:02 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Sure you did! Your living right!!!!!!! I hope so at least!!! ;)

on Nov. 28 2011 at 3:48 pm
readlovewrite SILVER, Greensboro, North Carolina
7 articles 1 photo 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be quick to listen, and slow to speak, and even slower to judge."

When I read this it was like you have a choice, your whole life depends on it, and you do the right thing.  It is cool that you can portray this in only 3 lines!  (Did I what you were trying to say?)

Loftus GOLD said...
on Nov. 26 2011 at 7:00 pm
Loftus GOLD, Ocoee, Florida
11 articles 1 photo 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own, and you know what you know. And you are the one who'll decide where you'll go." -Dr. Seuss

I really like this one too! Short and well written(:

on Nov. 26 2011 at 3:59 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

This made me smile. C: Awesome.

on Jul. 30 2011 at 11:01 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 460 comments
Very nice! :)

akrreid BRONZE said...
on Jul. 30 2011 at 6:29 pm
akrreid BRONZE, Wexford, Pennsylvania
2 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I never said it was going to be easy--I said it was going to be worth it."

Wow... very thought prevoking! I love it!

leafy said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 5:04 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

i love this, it makes the reader think, which path you took (hopefully life :) ). it reminds me of robert frost's "the road less traveled"

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jul. 26 2011 at 11:37 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 220 comments
This poem gets to you, in three lines you have the reader intrigued, that's talent.

on Jul. 24 2011 at 3:20 pm
iW0ntRunThisTime BRONZE, Paris, Other
2 articles 4 photos 19 comments
Very nice! A few months ago, dying would have been the right path for me, but so much can change so soon. It's weird to think about which path other people would choose, even though it seems obvious.

on Jul. 24 2011 at 3:03 pm
ohmakemeover BRONZE, Centerville, Minnesota
3 articles 0 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Touch comes before sight, before speech. It is the first language and the last, and it always tells the truth."- Margaret Atwood

Whoa, the ambiguity of this poem is really interesting.  I thought, Which path is actually the right path?  I really liked this one.

on Jul. 24 2011 at 12:22 am
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 735 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

i like this i write short pieces to so i like when see short pieces with great imagery but i do love longer piecees to congrats ona great haiku

on Jul. 23 2011 at 10:54 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
1 article 0 photos 202 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.
~Some random person on the Internet :P

Very powerful for just three short lines! Great job!

on Jul. 23 2011 at 7:47 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Do you mean like a long poem about this idea? That's a good idea. I'll inform you when you can look at it. Thanks for the other feedback!

.Izzy. BRONZE said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 7:35 pm
.Izzy. BRONZE, Broadview Heights, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 388 comments
I really liked this. There's a lot packed into three little lines, that's what I love about haikus. There seems to be a big idea behind this, I'd love to see that idea expanded upon.

on Jul. 23 2011 at 6:59 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

i don't write haiku's so i dont know if this will be any help but still! i really like it and even though its short i can tell there is a lot of emotion behind it. Its very realistic aswel, good job :)

on Jul. 22 2011 at 5:31 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Please, please comment!!!!


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