Report Abuse Home > Poetry > Haiku > On the Edge On the Edge By poetic.eyes, Bellingham, WA More by this author of falling, dying, or life. I took the right path. « Previous article More by this author Next article » Join the Discussion This article has 19 comments. Post your own! Report abuse Rayne said... Dec. 4, 2011 at 1:37 pm: Makes me wonder what path was the right one....... Good! Report abuse readlovewrite said... Nov. 28, 2011 at 3:48 pm: When I read this it was like you have a choice, your whole life depends on it, and you do the right thing. It is cool that you can portray this in only 3 lines! (Did I what you were trying to say?) samiasaskia24 replied... Nov. 28, 2011 at 8:02 pm : Sure you did! Your living right!!!!!!! I hope so at least!!! ;) samiasaskia24 replied... Nov. 28, 2011 at 8:44 pm : Originally I meant it to be like this: Warning, it may take sometime! Well, anyway, falling = getting hurt in any way, physical or mentally etc. dying = dying in any context, actually or metaphorically, and life = living, just LIVING it up (ha ha ha ;) )!!!! When I say qt. "I took the right path" I could have taken any mixture of these three. So, whatever one dose is right to you at that moment! (I should have just listed this in the 'notes' when I first posted the poem!) Thanks... (more ») samiasaskia24 replied... Nov. 28, 2011 at 8:45 pm : I don't know why it posted the same thing 2x! Report abuse BrokenBree said... Nov. 26, 2011 at 7:00 pm: I really like this one too! Short and well written(: Report abuse Im--NOT--Rayyn said... Nov. 26, 2011 at 3:59 pm: This made me smile. C: Awesome. Report abuse Raytheraym said... Jul. 30, 2011 at 11:01 pm: Very nice! :) Report abuse akrreid said... Jul. 30, 2011 at 6:29 pm: Wow... very thought prevoking! I love it! Report abuse leafy said... Jul. 29, 2011 at 5:04 pm: i love this, it makes the reader think, which path you took (hopefully life :) ). it reminds me of robert frost's "the road less traveled" Report abuse CarolynQ said... Jul. 26, 2011 at 11:37 pm: This poem gets to you, in three lines you have the reader intrigued, that's talent. Report abuse Emily F. said... Jul. 24, 2011 at 3:20 pm: Very nice! A few months ago, dying would have been the right path for me, but so much can change so soon. It's weird to think about which path other people would choose, even though it seems obvious. Report abuse ohmakemeover said... Jul. 24, 2011 at 3:03 pm: Whoa, the ambiguity of this poem is really interesting. I thought, Which path is actually the right path? I really liked this one. Report abuse musicispassion said... Jul. 24, 2011 at 12:22 am: i like this i write short pieces to so i like when see short pieces with great imagery but i do love longer piecees to congrats ona great haiku Report abuse NinjaGirl said... Jul. 23, 2011 at 10:54 pm: Very powerful for just three short lines! Great job! Report abuse .Izzy. said... Jul. 23, 2011 at 7:35 pm: I really liked this. There's a lot packed into three little lines, that's what I love about haikus. There seems to be a big idea behind this, I'd love to see that idea expanded upon. samiasaskia24 replied... Jul. 23, 2011 at 7:47 pm : Do you mean like a long poem about this idea? That's a good idea. I'll inform you when you can look at it. Thanks for the other feedback! Report abuse Hazel-daisy said... Jul. 23, 2011 at 6:59 pm: i don't write haiku's so i dont know if this will be any help but still! i really like it and even though its short i can tell there is a lot of emotion behind it. Its very realistic aswel, good job :) Report abuse samiasaskia24 said... Jul. 22, 2011 at 5:31 pm: Please, please comment!!!!