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I have fingernails
Long, prettily manicured
To claw at your face





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CaptainFabulous This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 6:27 am
haha xD too funny
 
ItsAshMal This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 10:53 am

ouch, this one stings. 

It's fun that you used a haiku to express such angsty feelings, since they're traditionally poems of nature and its wisdom. I like everything except the word "prettily" whichn just doesn't seem to ring true. 

 
FreedomIsMyVirtue replied...
Sept. 1, 2011 at 4:03 am
Thanks for the comment. And, no, it's not for anyone. I just saw Kristin's photo randomly popping out and I made this haiku for fun =))) but then I remembered my friend while writing this and I became more inspired...
 
ohheyyyelli said...
Aug. 28, 2011 at 4:25 pm
I actually really like how you used something pretty with something awful. Awesome, hehe(:
 
redhairCat This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 10:00 am
Somehow "long, pretty" doesn't seem to go with "claw at your face" but OK.
 
Alon_Freevoice replied...
Jul. 22, 2011 at 4:05 am

"Long, prettily manicured"
This should have been long and prettily manicured. But then, it would have 8 syllables so I used a comma :)

Thanks for the feedback, anyway... :)

 
musicispassion said...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 10:45 pm
I love this care to explain the random kristin stewart pic haha :P
 
Alon_Freevoice replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 11:04 pm
LOL. I'm not a hater. I just did it as an attempt to make readers smile. haha :D
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 11:41 pm
it worked haha
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 11:42 pm
well it worked haha :P
 
Alon_Freevoice replied...
Jul. 9, 2011 at 2:52 am
thanks... it was one of the first ten to pop up and i hoped it worked...
now, im happy it did... :)
 
CieraDesiree replied...
Jul. 12, 2011 at 10:10 am
This made me laugh lol I like it.
 
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