Ribbons of Thought

The ribbons of thought,
Twining into ideas,
Now become actions.





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Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 9:54 pm
I love how you convey such a deep emotion within three sentences of a haiku. AMAZING :)
 
shadowrider replied...
Aug. 6, 2011 at 12:08 pm
Thanks!                 
 
Fayrouz This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 10:03 pm
very unique three lines, it's very complex yet simple and stated so profoundly. keep writing :)
 
shadowrider replied...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 1:45 pm
Thank you!
 
Peacock said...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 12:47 pm

Me likes... <3

Complex without seeming so, because of how it all ties together so simply!

 
shadowrider replied...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 6:28 pm
Thankie kindly!
 
Vicky11 said...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 12:04 pm
I loved this! I don't know why, but the whole ribbons of thought thing really apealed to me. Great work!
 
shadowrider replied...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 12:07 pm
Thank you! That's what I thought when I wrote this!
 
Megan.J.B said...
Jul. 22, 2011 at 10:36 pm
really amazing job! I usually hate haikus, but this one is suprisingly nice :)
 
TwasBrilling replied...
Jul. 25, 2011 at 9:37 am
I agree...most haikus dont seem to have a message, or train of thought, but this does!
 
shadowrider replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 1:11 pm
Thank you both for the feedback!
 
ohheyyyelli said...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 10:51 am
Haikus are generally so unoriginal but this is amazing! Love it.
 
shadowrider replied...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 12:09 pm
Thank you!   Please check out my other stuff too!
 
Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 12:26 am
I love your haikus! This is amazing!!! :)
 
shadowrider replied...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 12:09 pm
Thank you!                                                 
 
ArgonElement said...
Jul. 12, 2011 at 8:40 am
It is so hard to write haikus! And even harder to write haikus that make sense! Haha (I am NOT a very good haiku writer) really great. :) Keep it up!
 
shadowrider replied...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 12:08 pm
Thanks for the feedback! I know I didn't think I was very good at writing haikus either! 
 
Poetryfaces This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 9, 2011 at 10:43 am
I love the tittle. And the word twining vrs twisting really gives a nice ring to the haiku. :)
 
alex198 said...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 9:16 am
I loved this. It's a really nice idea :)
 
shadowrider replied...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 12:08 pm
Thanks!                                              
 
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