Lune

Sweet Poem. Awesome metaphor and imagery. I LOVED it, definately 5 star worthy! btw check out some of my work too  :)

This is full of meaning, I love the imagery, the sweetness and brightness, yet somehow such intensity, really beautiful.

usually I read something twice or thrice before I rate it...I read this once and I rated it 5 immediately...you're a beautiful writer...awesome metaphor and lovely choice of words...love it! btw, check out some of my work too. :)

i really like it. good job

i like this poem it is very nice

 

nice metephor

Lovely. It definitely deserves its published status.

ooh beautiful word choice. ur a clever one ;)

Beautiful! I imagine the moon as an eye also! :D Keep Writing!

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Sob!!!!1 that was soooo beautiful

This captures the moment perfectly! I can imagine the whole setting and the story behind the girl/boy of this poem. Great work :)

that was beautiful. it totally stood out in the sea of all other haikus. it takes real talent to be able to grab somebody's attention with 17 syllables. keep at it!

I love this, very sweet and powerful.  Keep writing, and would you mind commenting on some of my work?  Thx!  5 stars  ;)

-Rose

What the heck is that?

Sweet and beautiful.

this is beautiful!

Very nice. A beautiful haiku, personification, and of course a nice array of verbal imagery. I like it. 

This is very good... I love the idea

very creative haiku. i like how you used personification.