When You Can't Sleep MAG

March 22, 2010
By JustJanelle BRONZE, North Andover, Massachusetts
JustJanelle BRONZE, North Andover, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Live in the sunshine, swim the sea, drink the wild air. -Emerson
You must be the square root of pi because you make me irrational. -Shivani Deshmukh


Insomnia rests
Its eyes on your sleepless chest
And strangles your dreams



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on Feb. 22 2013 at 1:42 pm
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Man must evolve for all human conflict a method which rejects revenge, aggression and retaliation. The foundation of such a method is love.”
- Martin Luther King Jr.

This is very powerful and deep, very good job!

on Aug. 8 2012 at 5:56 pm
Zolton225 BRONZE, Gurnee, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
\"Falsehood is never in words; it is in things.\" - Italo Calvino

I rather enjoyed that insomnia was strangling the dream, as in insomnia was personified and what not. Such beautiful simplicity in this. Great job, really.

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on Jan. 1 2012 at 12:19 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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Wow! I love the rhyme of the first two lines, the way you played with the word "rests," the powerful imagery of the last line - "strangles"! - really this is a brilliant haiku!

on Dec. 14 2011 at 3:36 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Liked that you personified insomnia~ the metaphor was great!

on Sep. 11 2011 at 6:04 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

I like the metaphor and I love, love, love this haiku!!!

on Aug. 22 2011 at 8:21 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

wow. I'm speechless. :O I love this!!! love the metaphor, love the choice of words, love everything. five stars!

check out my work too. :)


on Jun. 2 2011 at 3:42 pm
SweetPolarBearHugs PLATINUM, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"All conflict in literature is, in its simplest form, a struggle between good and evil." - unknown author.
"All that we see or seem
Is but a dream within a dream." - Edgar Allan Poe

this is very good, amazing!

on May. 31 2011 at 7:23 pm
tatertot1311 BRONZE, Johnson, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
"Dance like no one is watching you"

I love this!!!

on Jan. 14 2011 at 10:56 am
lyrical_assassin SILVER, Dubai, Other
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Beautiful! Loved it! :)

on Nov. 9 2010 at 8:58 pm
emobabe13 BRONZE, Sparks, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
two roads diverged in a yellow wood and I - I took the one less traveled by. By Robert Frost

that was great I can't wait to read more from you!!!

on Oct. 8 2010 at 5:04 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Lovely :)

Nice imagery, this was very well written :)

Congrats on getting it published!


on Oct. 7 2010 at 6:53 pm
MeganAnne PLATINUM, Niskayuna, New York
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Favorite Quote:
All my life I've looked at words as if I were seeing them for the first time. ~Ernest Hemingway

This was really, really good. Normally I don't think short poems are able to captivate so much emotion, but some writers can just do that. I surely wish I could, because you can. Amazing job.

on Oct. 7 2010 at 4:58 am
Whisperer PLATINUM, O&#39Fallon, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be hated for who i am, than loved for who I'm not~Anonymous

No individual has any right to come into and out of this world without leaving distinct and legit reasons for having passed through.~Anonymous

for as short as this poem is, it is expressed very well. :) i guess insomnia likes laying on people. great work!

if you want, check out, rate, and comment on my stuff. thanks :)


on Oct. 7 2010 at 1:15 am
I_am_the_only_me GOLD, Bakersfield, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Risk more than others think is safe. Care more than others think is wise. Dream more than others think is practical. Expect more than others think is possible. " ~ Cadet Maxim
that's an awesome quote learn it, love it, live by it.

I like it a lot an I don't normally care for haikus because they seem too short =] I feel like looking up haikus now :D great job

on Sep. 29 2010 at 10:43 pm
JustJanelle BRONZE, North Andover, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Live in the sunshine, swim the sea, drink the wild air. -Emerson
You must be the square root of pi because you make me irrational. -Shivani Deshmukh

Thank you very much!

on Sep. 29 2010 at 7:08 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

This is written with the essence of that thing which makes me love haikus. You chose your words carefully (as you were obliged to do) and made something both complicated and simple. Well done, my friend.


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