Hold Me Close To You

December 28, 2009
By 9CatsPerLife101 PLATINUM, Fairfax, Virginia
9CatsPerLife101 PLATINUM, Fairfax, Virginia
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Hold me close to you
While you croon a lullaby
Of a thousand tales

With each soft sweet note
I gain the strength, the courage
To sing along as well.


The author's comments:
This is a piece of basically me getting over certain obstacles that I couldn't have overcome without support.

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on Sep. 21 2012 at 8:57 pm
SapphireLamour DIAMOND, Omaha, Nebraska
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I liked this! it sounds like it would make a good song.  

on Sep. 21 2012 at 8:57 pm
SapphireLamour DIAMOND, Omaha, Nebraska
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i liked this one! it sounds as though it could be a song.

on Jul. 17 2012 at 10:08 am
Wearing_Westwood GOLD, Cary, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Don't think. Thinking is the enemy of creativity. It's self conscious, and anything self-conscious is lousy. You can't try to do things. You simply must do things. -Ray Bradbury

I like the idea behind your poem

but

The last line of the second verse has 6 syllables

to sing a-long as well

along is two syllables

other than that it was pretty good though


on Jan. 23 2012 at 7:23 am
Yo, kid what's ur prob bob? Gr8 poem

A Random Kid said...
on Jan. 23 2012 at 7:15 am
bad its bad

on Jun. 17 2011 at 10:14 pm
NicoleAnn00 BRONZE, Kansas City, Missouri
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Oh my gosh that was soooooooo amazing! i loved it!

on May. 17 2010 at 10:56 am
BleedingRose PLATINUM, Frederic, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
*The darkness holds infinite possibilities.

(mine)

Looooooooooooooooooove it!  :D   5 star worthy definitely, great job, so powerful! Keep writing

-Rose


on Feb. 13 2010 at 9:12 pm
shelby_kat DIAMOND, Warren, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"I can sum up everything I've learned about life in three words; it goes on." -Robert Frost

:D i love itttttttttttt

on Feb. 13 2010 at 4:18 pm
Katie Trudeau SILVER, Saranac Lake, New York
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Stunning. Absolutley stunning.

kellyisgr8 said...
on Jan. 30 2010 at 12:08 pm
kellyisgr8, Fairfax, Virginia
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haikus are definitely her thing!

on Jan. 20 2010 at 8:09 pm
sasssgirrrl22 PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Giving up is not a part of my vocabulary."
"Don't let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."
"Truth be told I miss ya, truth be told I'm lying."

agree completely w/ horsez :P ur very talented!

kellyisgr8 said...
on Jan. 19 2010 at 6:49 pm
kellyisgr8, Fairfax, Virginia
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if my bf gave this to me i would hug him so hard...sigh.

kellyisgr8 said...
on Jan. 19 2010 at 6:37 pm
kellyisgr8, Fairfax, Virginia
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i love your haikus, they just roll off my tongue and the emotion is just perfect.


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