Today I looked in your eyes,
I found a whole new world,
Why do you keep it locked inside?
I found a whole new world,
Why do you keep it locked inside?
DiamondsIntheGrass
arent haikus 5, 7, 5 sylable order?
um, yeah . . . I have a few where i don't exactly follow the rules, but to me they're haikus all the same!
Write139Haiku's are short, thought provoking, and eloquently worded. Yours resembles this completely, nicely done!
Thank-you so much for the comment, I'm glad you think it lives up to its haiku title!
-Rose
brax34
in my poems, i try to talk to and about people as well, but i usually cant express my feelings as well and in such a short manner as you
I think the key is to just let it flow- don't stop writing, you can always go back and edit. I don't usually change much in my poems though, but I do in fiction. Thanks for the comment, :D
-Rose
I really like this poem and your other poems too.
CesareAlways reflect back on yourself and how you lock things inside as well. I can relate to this poem from both sides of those glasses. I liked it.
Thanks so much for the comment! I like your first sentence, :) Do you write poems?
-Rose
NikiblueI like this one a lot. Some of your work is good, but I loved this one. Short and sweet, good job (:
Angel*music*loverI really like this one, but I think you should expand on it. Some poems can be left at one stanza, I think this is one of those ones where that doesn't apply. I really am left wanting more out of it than I got, but I liked what you had written, and I think you should keep going!
-Angel
-Angel
I though about it, and I agree with you on that! I think I'll repost it as a free verse thing, you know?
I love how you send such a strong message in so little words.
Thank you, that's really nice to hear and that's what I try for, as much meaning in every word as possible!
starrlovesi like how well the image relates to your haiku, nice writing :)
Thanks so much! I know I messed up on the syllables though, this was before I knew the 5/7/5 rule!
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