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Awkward Love In Haiku This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

You twirl your hair
Around a flawless finger
I am now quite hooked

You drop your pencil
My chance bounces across the floor
An ant on hot coals

Snatch it off the ground
You touched it so it's sacred
Look at it, then: “Ahem.”

You want it back now
It flops in my hand – a dead
Fish, and I'm struck dumb

Slack-jawed, I go numb
As your pinkie touches mine
While you grab it back

Swelling with passion
I open my mouth and try
To say stuff: No dice

Can't talk, so I close
My mouth again, looking like
A complete moron

Too damn shy again
Let this slip away – but I
Guess it's typical

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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The_Quiet_Girl said...
Oct. 12, 2012 at 4:18 pm
Amazing!!!
 
Fia-fia said...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 9:22 pm

This is great! Really good! Thank you

:)

 
WhiteWings said...
Dec. 1, 2011 at 6:31 pm
it was cool ; )
 
Dreamgirl95 said...
Nov. 9, 2011 at 4:36 pm
This is awsome, i've never read a hiku like this. The imagry was great too:)
 
Dollface2012 said...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 3:12 pm
Good use of imagery, i really enjoyed reading it
 
foreverme143 said...
Jun. 30, 2011 at 4:38 pm
this poem is so cute! i can see everything said happening in my mind! lol love the imagery
 
ilovedayna said...
Apr. 9, 2011 at 3:51 pm
this is pretty sweet- i bet she'd fall for you if you gave this poem to her... :) haha
 
MeaganNicole said...
Dec. 14, 2010 at 8:53 pm
Beautiful poem, but the first couple stanzas don't exactly follow the 5,7,5 syllable structure...
 
justsmileanddance said...
Dec. 14, 2010 at 3:59 pm
this created a great picture in my head!!!! good job!!!
 
MRose911 said...
Dec. 3, 2010 at 5:06 pm
If I was the person this was wrote for, wow :) haha GREAT poem!
 
RockingMusic said...
Nov. 22, 2010 at 1:20 pm
i know how u feel. amazing! im speechless.
 
bound4life4ever This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 9, 2010 at 8:15 pm
amazing! i noe how u feel;-)
 
jenny ;) said...
Oct. 5, 2010 at 7:46 am
i like this poem is soo pretty!! ;)
 
Creativity101 said...
Sept. 17, 2010 at 5:21 pm
this relates to me so well! nice job!
 
AsIAm This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 22, 2010 at 6:08 pm
This makes me laugh!  So cute!  The perfect interpretation of a so-close-yet-so-far moment :) ~AsIAm
 
foreverwelsh said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 3:59 pm
love how casual it sounds :) really well written
 
Marlyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 13, 2010 at 10:00 pm
as cool some of the phrases are, i dont think that i could call this a haiku.... it is supposed to be within a repeating meter pattern
 
DifferentTeenThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jan. 11, 2011 at 2:34 pm
I agree but it was a good poem. (:
 
melone96 said...
May 15, 2010 at 3:45 pm
love this!!
 
Nyrihaz said...
Apr. 26, 2010 at 9:54 pm

Hehe, very typical for me too. Nice use of words: a normal, casual scene recreated in Haiku and perfectly done.

"Slack-jawed, I go numb..." loved that stanza.

 
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