The Isolation, the Seperation MAG

March 19, 2009
By writingsavedmylife SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
writingsavedmylife SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
8 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We've got this gift of love, but love is like a precious plant. You can't just accept it and leave it in a cupboard or just think it's going to get on by itself. You've got to keep watering it. You've got to really look after it and nurture it." - John Lennon

"In my end is my beginning."... - T.S. Eliot


Hair is falling over her eyes
A curly brown curtain
Between reality and eyes of sadness
Hiding feelings that her face can’t help but show
Wishing it would all go away
Blinking back tears she knows so well
Each drop that falls pushes her farther from the world around her
Tangling her up in these feelings she keeps inside
The unconscious thoughts that she hides
Become her new reality
The emotions are too raw
To share with other people.
He brushes past her
Bringing her back for a moment.
It makes her both long for him and loathe him
In reality, on the other side
One scary moment
Has passed by
Is it safe to pull back the curtain?
Or should she stay hidden?
She starts to emerge
But the vulnerabilty
The defenselessness
Is too much
In case of another tragedy,
Another gust of him
Another wave of tears
She stays behind
She plays it safe
Separate from reality
Although it waits to surround her again.
To engulf and consume her.
Chew her up
And spit out what’s left.
So she lets the curtain close again
Taking in the honeysuckle smell
The smell of safety
The smell of isolation
Calming her foolish concealing heart.


The author's comments:
I was sitting in my English class and my hair fell out from behind my ear and covered my eye and the idea just hit me. It showcased so many feelings in one poem perfectly. Let me know what you think :)

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LycaCry said...
on Dec. 12 2011 at 2:43 pm
LycaCry, Las Vegas, Nevada
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This peom is awesome

i love the feeling and emotion it has the way it wavers b/w love n pain

it looks into the heart of what many fear. great work


Tomboy GOLD said...
on Dec. 12 2011 at 9:03 am
Tomboy GOLD, Broken Arrow, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"The human heart had hidden treasures; in secret kept; in silence sealed; the thoughts; the hopes; the dreams; the pleasures; whose charms were broken if revealed" - Charlotte Bronte

I wrote something similar to this but this is so much better!  This is an amazing poem! :)

on Sep. 4 2010 at 4:26 pm
Roseyalia SILVER, Don&#39t Need To Know, California
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Favorite Quote:
Take my love, take my land, take me where I cannot stand. I don't care, I'm still free, you can't take the sky from me. Take me out to the black. Tell 'em I ain't coming back. Burn the land and boil the sea, but you can't take the sky from me.

Absolutely incredible.  Beautiful expression of a single moment in time.  5 stars.  Keep on writing!

on Apr. 5 2010 at 8:32 pm
ceruleanconfusion, Ann Arbor, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Truth resides in every human heart, and one has to search for it there and to be guided by truth as one sees it" - mahatma gandhi

This is a really lovely poem and basically sums up my life too, especially those last lines: "The smell of safety / The smell of isolation / Calming her foolish concealing heart"

 

Keep writing!!


on Aug. 25 2009 at 1:19 pm
writingsavedmylife SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
8 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We've got this gift of love, but love is like a precious plant. You can't just accept it and leave it in a cupboard or just think it's going to get on by itself. You've got to keep watering it. You've got to really look after it and nurture it." - John Lennon

"In my end is my beginning."... - T.S. Eliot

thank you all very much. it's nice to know that people can relate to my poetry :)

on Aug. 23 2009 at 1:16 am
Lucy4himnotu ELITE, Richardson, Texas
148 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am Happy to The Point of Fear" -Ralph Waldo Emmerson

This is beautiful. I have no corrections. I know that everyone has felt this way at some point. You captured one moment in time that everyone can relate to, and described it perfectly. the thought process that she has is exactly true. Beautiful. I loved it.

on Aug. 12 2009 at 5:44 am
bite.sized.beauty GOLD, Woodridge, Illinois
14 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
true boredom is perfection

i love everything about it. everything is so raw and real... i feel this way all the time. its beautiful

on Jul. 26 2009 at 1:59 am
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
71 articles 2 photos 180 comments
awesome

on Jul. 10 2009 at 7:56 am
Crazzzy_Megan GOLD, Ventura, California
12 articles 0 photos 6 comments
Very good poem!

on Apr. 1 2009 at 5:51 pm
YeseniaG SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
7 articles 1 photo 122 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is what happens when you're busy making plans.

Great work! Love the way it appeals to the senses.


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