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Conformity

February 22, 2016
By Rae1611 BRONZE, Rockaway, New Jersey
Rae1611 BRONZE, Rockaway, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"We can complain because rose bushes have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorn bushes have roses" - unknown


“Freak”
You hiss at her
She didn’t ask for this
It just happened
Her whole world drowned
because of you

She didn’t mind, at first
but you ran like poison through her thoughts
and told her what perfect should be

Her skin is too pale,
her lips too thin,
her veins too blue,
her hair is gone.
Is her life not as valuable as yours
just because she looks like this?

She fought hard
She was brave
But you convinced her
to give up
To let go
She was beautiful, I think
But true beauty, thanks to you, never lasts

Is her life not as valuable as yours because she looks this way?
Because she’s too pale, too thin, too sick, too ugly
And now she’s gone
Nothing more than a whisper
Of what you have done
AND YOU COULDN’T CARE LESS


The author's comments:

I want others to understand the dangerous levels conformity is reaching in today's society. 


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henta BRONZE said...
on Sep. 29 2017 at 11:39 am
henta BRONZE, Monticello, Illinois
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I love this a lot. Keep writing! ( not to be a stalker, you seem really cool & BrAndOn UriNe is greAt)

on Sep. 23 2017 at 12:10 am
HereSheIs BRONZE, Wellesley, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"We can easily forgive a child who is afraid of the dark; the real tragedy of life is when men are afraid of the light." -Plato

Very intense and raw, and you did a good job channeling that

on Sep. 19 2017 at 7:14 pm
alyssa0401 PLATINUM, Staten Island, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"In the end, we only regret the chances we didn't take."

Wow. That was extremely deep and brought a tear to my eye. You have an immense amount of talent.

bob2 said...
on Sep. 11 2017 at 9:47 pm
lol my name is jeff

on Aug. 29 2017 at 11:19 am
Mikayla1287 BRONZE, Wheatfield, Indiana
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This is beautifully written. Your point was clear and powerful...absolutely amazing

on Apr. 4 2017 at 9:39 pm
manasisoman SILVER, Hillsborough, New Jersey
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This is amazing! Love it!

on Mar. 17 2017 at 9:21 am
EvalynnHeather GOLD, Clemmons, North Carolina
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This gave me chills... so true, and not only is it true but it's written beautifully. Great job! Keep writing!

on Jan. 27 2017 at 11:52 am
quillwriting GOLD, Mesa, Arizona
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I liked the point of view of this piece, really beautiful.

on Jun. 2 2016 at 8:24 am
astridianmayflys GOLD, Rye, New York
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Favorite Quote:
If every night I go to sleep knowing/ That I gave everything that I had to give/Then it's all I could've asked for.

Conformity is one of the things that I think should be addressed way more, however it is rarely discussed. This poem caught my eye purely for the title, and it didn't fail to impress me.

SailDad said...
on Feb. 28 2016 at 1:14 am
you never fail to impress, and even astound me.

mmv3 said...
on Feb. 25 2016 at 11:34 am
Amazingly written. You created a vivid picture of conformity through a strong use of figurative and literary devices.

Maddy said...
on Feb. 24 2016 at 8:49 pm
courageous piece. confronts the callousness of some people, and shines light on the suffering of their victims.

BeccaMom said...
on Feb. 24 2016 at 6:05 pm
Wow! What an amazing poem. I am very impressed with the poet

Uncle Dave said...
on Feb. 24 2016 at 9:27 am
Very intriguing POV. Using 'You' speaks directly to the reader, involving them directly in the narrative from the very 1st stanza. Nice Job JDRT.

CherylJI said...
on Feb. 24 2016 at 8:45 am
Beautifully written. Really makes you think.

on Feb. 23 2016 at 10:01 pm
Nathanwallace52 BRONZE, Hinesville, Georgia
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Great job

EmmKay said...
on Feb. 23 2016 at 9:46 pm
Intense and well written-impressive, keep it up!