Conformity

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“Freak”
You hiss at her
She didn’t ask for this
It just happened
Her whole world drowned
because of you

She didn’t mind, at first
but you ran like poison through her thoughts
and told her what perfect should be

Her skin is too pale,
her lips too thin,
her veins too blue,
her hair is gone.
Is her life not as valuable as yours
just because she looks like this?

She fought hard
She was brave
But you convinced her
to give up
To let go
She was beautiful, I think
But true beauty, thanks to you, never lasts

Is her life not as valuable as yours because she looks this way?
Because she’s too pale, too thin, too sick, too ugly
And now she’s gone
Nothing more than a whisper
Of what you have done
AND YOU COULDN’T CARE LESS






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henta said...
today at 11:39 am
I love this a lot. Keep writing! ( not to be a stalker, you seem really cool & BrAndOn UriNe is greAt)
 
HereSheIsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sep. 23 at 12:10 am
Very intense and raw, and you did a good job channeling that
 
writerforever4104This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sep. 19 at 7:14 pm
Wow. That was extremely deep and brought a tear to my eye. You have an immense amount of talent.
 
bob2 said...
Sep. 11 at 9:47 pm
lol my name is jeff
 
Mikayla1287 said...
Aug. 29 at 11:19 am
This is beautifully written. Your point was clear and powerful...absolutely amazing
 
manasisoman said...
Apr. 4 at 9:39 pm
This is amazing! Love it!
 
EvalynnHeather said...
Mar. 17 at 9:21 am
This gave me chills... so true, and not only is it true but it's written beautifully. Great job! Keep writing!
 
quillwritingThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 27 at 11:52 am
I liked the point of view of this piece, really beautiful.
 
astridianmayflys said...
Jun. 2, 2016 at 8:24 am
Conformity is one of the things that I think should be addressed way more, however it is rarely discussed. This poem caught my eye purely for the title, and it didn't fail to impress me.
 
SailDad said...
Feb. 28, 2016 at 1:14 am
you never fail to impress, and even astound me.
 
mmv3 said...
Feb. 25, 2016 at 11:34 am
Amazingly written. You created a vivid picture of conformity through a strong use of figurative and literary devices.
 
Maddy said...
Feb. 24, 2016 at 8:49 pm
courageous piece. confronts the callousness of some people, and shines light on the suffering of their victims.
 
BeccaMom said...
Feb. 24, 2016 at 6:05 pm
Wow! What an amazing poem. I am very impressed with the poet
 
Uncle Dave said...
Feb. 24, 2016 at 9:27 am
Very intriguing POV. Using 'You' speaks directly to the reader, involving them directly in the narrative from the very 1st stanza. Nice Job JDRT.
 
CherylJI said...
Feb. 24, 2016 at 8:45 am
Beautifully written. Really makes you think.
 
Nathanwallace52 said...
Feb. 23, 2016 at 10:01 pm
Great job
 
EmmKay said...
Feb. 23, 2016 at 9:46 pm
Intense and well written-impressive, keep it up!
 
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