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February 25, 2009
By Beau Wright BRONZE, Goreville, Illinois
Beau Wright BRONZE, Goreville, Illinois
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Time will reveal everything I want to know now.
I wish time was just the name of a street.
I’d drive a black car up and down time.
I’d be happy.



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on Mar. 1 2011 at 10:44 am
Crazymexican GOLD, Jay, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
not sure

nice poem there

KylaS said...
on Feb. 25 2011 at 9:40 am
KylaS, Clemons, Iowa
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I really like how short and sweet this piece is. Powerful, but no gaudy words to get in the way. Beautiful idea that all people can relate to!(:

abbymac said...
on Feb. 25 2011 at 8:01 am
abbymac, Easley, South Carolina
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I like how simple, yet powerful this poem is. Great job.

LaylaA said...
on Feb. 7 2011 at 11:17 pm
LaylaA, Buenos Aires, Other
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Favorite Quote:
“Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth.” Oscar Wilde

I wish you continued writing more because it's very promising and I really like it. But the last verse just cut the flow to it. 

on Feb. 7 2011 at 7:42 pm
sweetdollsarah BRONZE, Hemet, California
3 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love me or Hate me it's still an obsession." --I don't know who wrote or said this quote got it off a friends school book and it stuck with me. "Pickles!" --I just say this all the time!! "It's not that I'm afraid to die, I just don't want to be there when it happens." -- Woody Allen

It was a good poem but it was simple...too plain add some funk or a big bang at the ending make us feel what you felt when you rote it make us feel your words your mood your atmoshere so that we aren't reading just empty words.

on Feb. 7 2011 at 2:50 pm
ShelbyMarie93 PLATINUM, Lexington, Nebraska
35 articles 1 photo 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When Death to either shall come -- I pray it be first to me." ~Robert Bridges
or
"Life is not a jump; it's a headfirst dive."
or
"Within you I lose myself; without you I find myself wanting to be lost again."

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╚══`.¸.Isaac H.

Nice idea. However, I think it would have been much, MUCH better if you had elaborated on the idea. Make it longer...captivate your reader. Make us SEE and FEEL your idea, not just read it...

bobhot6 said...
on Jan. 16 2011 at 10:22 pm
I disagree. I think the fact that the conclusion is so simple and concise makes the piece very powerful. The author could've just as easily tried to stretch the ending out with a jumble of words, be he/she got the point across with  3 simple words. Nice work!!

on Jan. 16 2011 at 6:35 pm
silentvocal SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't try to fix what isn't broken

I agree because the words just seem to flow, even though it's brief it's all that's been like encased in it u know? like such a dense concept and the selected wording. I do like it-it's something you could sit on for a while just thinking about.

Kiyoko GOLD said...
on Jan. 16 2011 at 3:34 pm
Kiyoko GOLD, Knoxville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Independence is my happiness, I view things as they are without regard to place or person. My country is the world, and my religion is to do good. - Thomas Paine

Nice Metaphor. I think that the last line is weak, though. Like there's no real significance or "oomph" to it. 

wyatt_r SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2010 at 9:55 pm
wyatt_r SILVER, Lake Hopatcong, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Wo is more foolish? The fool or the fool who follows him?" -Obi-wan Kenobi

i only read this over once and didnt really proccess it but i could feel the depth

Peniel BRONZE said...
on Dec. 3 2010 at 4:36 pm
Peniel BRONZE, Syracuse, New York
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this is a really nice poem it says alot even if its so short

Photo_97 said...
on Dec. 3 2010 at 4:01 pm
Photo_97, Ct., Connecticut
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i agree 100% KEEP IT UP 8D

on Dec. 3 2010 at 12:13 pm
dancer0529 BRONZE, Arlington Heights, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
tee hee tee hee: my dad and me and my friend at 1 in the morning

this is really good and really sad at the same time...i wish this actually happened in the first place too it would be a good ending to all my problems. please keep writing....

Brandon Sipp said...
on Nov. 11 2010 at 8:15 am
Brandon Sipp, Cleveland Heights, Ohio
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i THINK THIS IS TRY TO EXPLAIN THAT SH'E IMPATIENT

on Nov. 3 2010 at 7:57 am
D_Beauty BRONZE, Euclid, Ohio
2 articles 1 photo 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God didn't promise days without pain, laughter without sorrow, sun without rain, but He did promise strength for the day, comfort for the tears, and light for the way."

I really like this poem. Its straight forward. Short and sweet. Keep writing! 

JillybeanN said...
on Oct. 20 2010 at 5:10 pm
JillybeanN, Charlottesville, Virginia
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
When a person dies, their soul becomes a star. The brighter the life, the brighter the star.

This is a great little poem with an awesome twist to it.

on Oct. 20 2010 at 9:27 am
CammyLashay SILVER, Java, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
Failure is not for me.

Truly takes thought...enjoyed it

 


on Sep. 28 2010 at 8:48 pm
Alice_in_Wonderland GOLD, San Clemente, California
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Favorite Quote:
“I could give up, I could stay stuck, or I could move on, So I put one foot front of the other, No no no nothing’s gonna break my stride, “ –David Archuleta (The Other Side of Down)

That's a cool poem! Great Job! WIll you please read some of my poems?

on Sep. 28 2010 at 7:18 pm
LeslieAnn BRONZE, Midvale, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
\\\\\\\"Dream as if you\\\\\\\'ll live forever, Live as if you\\\\\\\'ll die today\\\\\\\" \\\\\\\"Life is not about waiting for the storms to pass, its about learning to dance in the rain.\\\\\\\"

I love this. Its simple and to the point. You couldn't have done a better job.

on Sep. 28 2010 at 5:18 pm
passion.fable14 SILVER, Fort Collins, Colorado
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is like a cup of coffee. You gotta...dive right in and drink it fast before it cools. Because coffee sucks when its cool. And it tastes like crap. Do you want your life to taste like crap Sam? I don't. That's why i don't drink coffee."
~~Carlt

geeze. what's wrong with you? OBVIOUSLY you can't appreciate beautiful work when it's sitting right on front of you on a silver plate.




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