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wonderful.

Check out my poem "puddle-wonderful"

This was a simple poem. Nonetheless,it was amazing. ;D

Simple is elegance. Freaking awesome!

this is beautiful! AWESOMEEEE!!!! 'I'd drive a black car up and down time'

SO true..

I love how it's so simple but full of a feeling that almost everyone can relate to.

simple,yet really cool:) great job!

every single person in the world can relate to this. amazing.

It relates to readers well and how you tied time to a street and yourself to a car was good too!

This poem relates well to the reader---how we all feel this way!

simplistic beauty

Well done. Message is very pronounced and very easy to relate to!

This is a great metaphor. It lets us feel like we're in control of where we are on the line of time. We can go back, we can speed up, hit the brakes to enjoy a moment, go ahead to see what's coming. I absolutely love it!

I like this poem, very short, but you got the message across. Reminds me of Hemingway. Check out my stuff, it tends to be short also.

thats cooll...... ppl plz check out and comment on my work

i like this, it makes me think. but i don't get why this can get published in the mag but my stuff can't. any suggestions? check out my work :)

I wish time was a blind man over whom I could run my car. I'd run over him, back over him, then do it again--all for the sake of spite.

plz, check out my work. nice poem

That's great. i loved it

This is incredible.  I know exactly how the narrator feels, how you could just rewind or fast forward time. (At least I think that's what the message is here.)  I love how it's so short and simple.  It makes it very poignant.

Wow! This is a great poem! Short and sweet, I like it! Great message too!

THis is amazing! Can you check out some of my work? I think youd like it! 

I really like this, just because I like the message of it. I also think that it's very relatable. If anyone has time could they please check out my work?

You did a great job. Keep it up! would you mind commenting and rating my work? Thanks!

wow, i like this poem, its simple yet i still also feel the same sometimes.  its amazing!

amazing i feel that way all the time

In simple words, beautiful.

This poem is great. I also would like "time" to be the name of a street and drive up and down it.

this is exactly how i feel as i get ready to go off to college. this poem is amazing

 

Awesome. I love how simple it was. Can you guys check out mine. i need some feedback.

The simplicity makes it great!

Love it! You captured so much meaning in FOUR lines; that's talent! Keep doing what you're doing, because it's perfect!

If anyone is bored and feels like giving feedback on a poem, can you check out mine? It's called "Rock Bottom" and is in the writing forum under poetry. Thanks!

You could have rambled on forever about sentimentality and everything else for endless verses. Instead you only asked for a few seconds of our time, and it is still as good.

Plus, please check out my poems "True Colors" and "Shoveled" if you get a chance and leave some feedback!

Great Job!!

Same here!!! :)))

Short and sweet. I enjoyed this. =)

Would anyone be willing to check out my poem? Please give me some comments/rates, I need more feedback! Thanks!

that was! great

So true! :)

Yeah, you had a really good choice of words.

You got your meaning stated in just one verse!  I wish I could do that.

that was brilliant in so few words! really talented!

Love the poem! but maybe if you talked about why it would make you happy in the last line it would flow better.

very pretty :) you'v a clever mind :)

wow, what a great picture of your imagination!

 

this is really good i love it it makes you tghink. dont listont o people who dnt like it. i love it

i feel like it's a bit redundant.  simple poems seem to sit with me much more smoothly than a longer one but i feel like this poem is lacking feeling.  the first two lines i felt were setting me up for a beautiful metaphor or introducing me to your message.  the third line kind of threw me off a bit.  i think it would have been more interesting for me to see as a reader, something more along the lines of what names you would've picked or metaphorically traveling down the road... (more »)