Do Not Disturb

July 14, 2015
By AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
18 articles 0 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It takes more strength to cry at mid-defeat."
-Susan Boyle
"The closer you get to the light, the bigger your shadow becomes."
-Kingdom Hearts


Do not disturb me.

I am dying.

We should have known

Not to fiddle with love.

Broken heart strings say,

“This is it.

We didn’t plan

For the falling and crying.”

It’s so quiet now, save

For our screaming hearts and minds.

The end has come.

Now that  I know what the price is,

I don’t want to pay.


I don’t want to pay,

Now that I know what the price is.

The end has come

For our screaming hearts and minds.

It’s so quiet now, save

For the falling and crying.

We didn’t plan;

This is it.

Broken heart strings say

Not to fiddle with love.

We should have known.

I am dying.

Do not disturb me.


The author's comments:

This piece is unique- it is written so that you can read it forwards and backwards and it still makes sense.


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on Nov. 17 2015 at 4:09 pm
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

This is actually incredibly impressive. Certainly one of the best poems I've seen here, in emotion, rhyme, and form. Good job, Avenge!

on Aug. 26 2015 at 11:55 am
BlanishCoffee BRONZE, Sterling, Virginia
2 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Women like 2 things,knives and unicorns."

Fricking Amazing! That's all I can say

on Aug. 16 2015 at 4:58 pm
PoeticAtheist SILVER, Durham, North Carolina
7 articles 7 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I go to seek a great perhaps."

Everything about you is just perfection. Thank you for sharing

on Aug. 15 2015 at 6:56 am
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Leave nothing but footprints,
Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.

It truly is great, the way it is written can be compared to life, and it is really touching piece.!

on Aug. 12 2015 at 10:18 am
RobotPenn. SILVER, El Paso, Texas
8 articles 1 photo 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Profound change is cumulative."

Friggin gorgeous, as always! I'm really impressed in how you could reverse it. It just shows how much work you put into these. My favorite line I think is the one that says "It's so quiet now". Ugh, those four words and my gut gets wrenched open. I loved it! :)

on Jul. 21 2015 at 3:18 pm
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
29 articles 0 photos 207 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

wow. now I know you said you could relate to my work, but man oh man, I can relate to yours. this line in particular "The end has come For our screaming hearts and minds. It’s so quiet now, save For the falling and crying. " just wow.

SilverLiner said...
on Jul. 21 2015 at 11:46 am
SilverLiner, Accra, Other
0 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"uhhhhhhhhh..."

whoa! Haven't been here in a while, but I'm pleased that i am now - this poem is breathtaking! Truly amazing what you did. Haven't really read many poems that brilliantly do what you did with the forwards/backwards bit. *thumbs up*

on Jul. 20 2015 at 7:43 pm
Consalvator BRONZE, South Jordan, Utah
1 article 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once you make a decision, the universe conspires to make it happen." - Ralph Waldo Emerson

AGH The format is brilliant! I love poems that can be read forwards and back and still retain meaning. Excellent job, and eloquent as always! Really, I have no negative comment, this is amazing!

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jul. 20 2015 at 5:56 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Wow, I love the whole concept of this poem, how you can read it backwards and forwards and it still makes perfect sense. I've only seen something like this done a few times, and you really rocked it with this piece. Wonderful job, I read it more than twice to grasp the full effect. Keep writing!




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