No Vacancy

June 18, 2015
By simple_effect SILVER, Franklin Park, New Jersey
simple_effect SILVER, Franklin Park, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Security is a superstition; it does not exist in nature. Life is either one daring adventure or nothing." ~Helen Keller


No vacancy.
My apologies.
For every room on my body is inhabited
by lies and dreams that never broke through to reality.
I wish it was easy
to give you the key to Room 302, but it’s already occupied
by the one that introduced me to adulthood.
Room 146? The maid hasn’t gotten around to
cleaning out the memories of the previous guest
who christened my naïve lips.
Maybe Room 410 or 412, you ask? The fingertip suites?
Sorry, but they’re already interlocked with another’s.
Once again, I apologize.
No vacancy.
Sorry for the inconvenience.


The author's comments:

Thanks for taking the time to read this. :)


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hwoodruff98 said...
on Apr. 12 2017 at 10:47 pm
hwoodruff98, Lititz, Pennsylvania
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Wow, the extended metaphor in this was beautiful; I really enjoyed it. The poem flowed nicely, and I thought the "Sorry, not sorry" tone of it was fantastic. The voice of the speaker so accurately combined with the extended metaphor to show someone who is tired of opening up to people and being hurt/doesn't have the desire to let someone else into her life. All in all, this was very well-written.

on Aug. 24 2015 at 9:28 am
Jtatsu PLATINUM, East Brunswick, New Jersey
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Wow, I really liked your poem. Comparing your body to a hotel was incredibly creative, and the pacing was very well done.

ellwist SILVER said...
on Aug. 22 2015 at 7:40 am
ellwist SILVER, Surabaya, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"They only let you be this happy when they're preparing to take something from you." -Khaled Hosseini, the Kite Runner.

I think this poem is one of the few that could've benefited from being longer--I really wanted to see you stretch the history of this hotel metaphor-thing, describing all the rooms left abandoned with wet stains on the bed and broken vases, but reading this alone was lovely on its own. Great job!

on Aug. 13 2015 at 8:38 am
simple_effect SILVER, Franklin Park, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Security is a superstition; it does not exist in nature. Life is either one daring adventure or nothing." ~Helen Keller

*I'm (sorry)

on Aug. 1 2015 at 3:18 pm
Free_One PLATINUM, ????, Ohio
40 articles 1 photo 773 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am not invincible or unstoppable, but I stay strong because it is the only way to survive in this world."

This is beautiful, really enjoyed reading this and I hope you continue your work! :) ~ Free :)(;

on Jul. 6 2015 at 4:33 pm
simple_effect SILVER, Franklin Park, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Security is a superstition; it does not exist in nature. Life is either one daring adventure or nothing." ~Helen Keller

Thanks! I glad you think that, it means a lot!

on Jul. 1 2015 at 2:11 pm
AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"It takes more strength to cry at mid-defeat."
-Susan Boyle
"The closer you get to the light, the bigger your shadow becomes."
-Kingdom Hearts

This is amazing! I'm so glad you are gracing us all with your talent, thank you:)

on Jun. 26 2015 at 5:24 pm
simple_effect SILVER, Franklin Park, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Security is a superstition; it does not exist in nature. Life is either one daring adventure or nothing." ~Helen Keller

Thanks so much!

Beila BRONZE said...
on Jun. 21 2015 at 7:06 pm
Beila BRONZE, Palo Alto, California
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Favorite Quote:
"The coldest winter I ever spent was a summer in San Francisco." -Mark Twain

Oh, my gosh, I LOVE THIS!!! So much!!! Wow, the concept, the pacing, the slant rhyme, the word choice, the everything is so clever and powerful! Wow, I truly am so excited that I found this poem. It's brilliant.


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