The Moon's Idea MAG

March 31, 2015
By EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.


the white freckles
on night’s face,
speckle across.
or are the freckles
red and blue too?
(because if stars can be
red and blue,
why can’t freckles too?)
the moon leans back
and puts his feet up;
his bright, white toenail
right into night’s features.
or is that Chester smiling?
(the moon looks like
it could be a toenail
or Chester’s secret smile.)
something between
a smile and a frown
was sent toward the moon
for putting his bare feet up.
and right into my face, moon!
(night and moon,
they like to bicker so,
but they still love each other.)
oh, dear moon, ha ha.
you should have known
that night would have
raised such a fuss,
when you put your feet up.
(don’t frown at me
like it was my idea
in the first place; it was yours.)
all of this happening,
right in front of me
as I hear the lonely,
loud howls of one coyote
and the night-birds sing.
(it was the moon’s idea, night!
I swear it wasn’t mine.
No, night! Not that kind of swearing!
moon, don’t you dare run away,
you come back right now!
it was your idea in the first place!)


The author's comments:

These are just my thoughts. XD I wrote this when I was outside looking at the moon and stars, thinking. 


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on Jul. 6 2017 at 9:08 am
21bmalizia PLATINUM, Dresher, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"reach for the moon, even if you miss you will land amoung the stars"

This is beautiful!!! You have a talent. I love the simple but descriptive way you wrote it. Great job!!!!

on Apr. 26 2016 at 4:20 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

@guard-girl, thank you. I just seem to like to give personalities to things that people would never consider, haha. But thank you again, guard-girl - your words, they mean a lot to me. :)

on Apr. 25 2016 at 6:08 pm
guard-girl GOLD, Clover, South Carolina
10 articles 11 photos 148 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Trust in the Lord with all your heart, and do not depend on your own understanding. Seek His will in all you do, and he will show you which path to take."
Proverbs 3:5-6

I love this! It's so descriptive, and it's awesome that you gave the moon and night personalities! I have never thought about the moon as someone kicking back and showing their feet to the sky; That's super unique! This totally deserved to be published! :)

on Dec. 20 2015 at 12:51 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Oh, goodness. I am so sorry that my reply is so late. I actually did not know that this was published until a certain time ago, but I have a copy of the November Teen Ink Magazine and I saw that it was true that I was published. :) Thank you very much for your comment and kind words. :)

Lunch SILVER said...
on Oct. 22 2015 at 10:38 pm
Lunch SILVER, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"There is always something left to love." – Gabo Marquez

Goodness, that was fun and playful! Loved it! Congratulations on getting published :)

on Apr. 28 2015 at 11:34 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Thank you, @Trin_Freckles. :) That means a lot. :) You're an amazing and talented writer. I've read some of your works before. :)

on Apr. 28 2015 at 12:48 pm
Trin_Freckles GOLD, Troutman, North Carolina
11 articles 12 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
When your sad, stop being sad and be awesome instead

Ive always loved your work, i wish i could write this well

on Apr. 24 2015 at 2:16 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Oh, my applesauce. I'm so sorry this reply is so late. :( Thank you so much, @Hanban12 . :) It means a lot. :)

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Apr. 16 2015 at 5:29 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

First of all, congrats on the Editor's Choice, Emily! I'm so glad you're getting recognized for your amazing work :) I really like how you placed the dialogue in the poem in parentheses, it gives off the feeling that the reader is reading something they're not supposed to, like an inside secret revealing the true characters of Moon and Night haha. All in all, this piece is very creative and unique, which I love. Great job, and keep writing! :)

on Apr. 7 2015 at 3:21 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

@Bless_survivor13, thank you. (:

on Apr. 7 2015 at 9:14 am
Bless_survivor13 GOLD, Daytona Beach, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"The realest people dont have them many friends "
tupac

good job with this moon idea

on Apr. 2 2015 at 7:43 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

I am so glad you enjoyed and love it. This makes me happy and rather shocked, haha. :) I did not realize that my poem was good. I thank you so much for your encouraging words and for commenting, it means a lot to me. I thank you again! :)

on Apr. 2 2015 at 6:41 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

@ScarlettJ. , I thank you! :) Your comment means a lot to me and has encouraged me so, so I truly thank you. :)

on Apr. 2 2015 at 12:57 pm
ScarlettJ. DIAMOND, West Newton, Pennsylvania
93 articles 0 photos 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are only confined by the walls you build around yourself." "Follow your heart, but take your brain with you." "You were born to be real, not to be perfect."

@MissEmilyDickinson this is amazing! You are so creative, truly. Thank you so much for sharing this with us!

JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 2 2015 at 11:54 am
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
43 articles 10 photos 527 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you."

"Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, 'I just don't care.'?"

I've never read something simultaneously amazing/well-written AND adorable! I love everything about this, it flowed so well, was so random, I love it! :D


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