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I have never heard it, phantom whale calls,
so deep they make one cringe, so shrill they make one cry,
except before I was born.

I know,
before I developed the lips, eyelashes, fingers, brain,
I have now,
I lived in the ocean,
I floated like a little walnut,
I was the simplest creature,
I heard the whale song.
This makes me wonder,
was it only I who received this gift,
or was it you also?

Giant whales, so big, beyond my comprehension,
peaceful beauties,
we have killed you all.
We stabbed and raped and took
for no good reason.
We took our ships,
I take blame somehow, I feel so awful,
we sharpened sticks and killed your
families
peace
your song traveled across the ocean,
you swam together for centuries through the deep,
mystic water.
What were you saying? Were you speaking through god?
Are you god?
I think we should worship you.
You blinked your eyes slowly, and your tears melted
with the ocean
We drank your blood with greedy slurps.
Are we evolution’s mistake?

I want to learn your song.
My race will never learn,
I am so lost with my race.
If I could trade in my clumsy legs and sharp words,
I would gladly accept your fins and godly
demeanor.

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radicalhonestyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
today at 4:00 pm:
While I don't agree with this poem, it's beautifully written.
 
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HHHaustin said...
May 2 at 10:44 am:
I liked the metaphors and similes you put into it and the stanzas.
 
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mickeymouse said...
May 1 at 2:23 pm:
In your poem I loved how you used a cliche to keep putting yourself in the poem. I also liked how you compared yourself to things like a nut floating on water.
 
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emilar said...
May 1 at 10:38 am:
This poem was beautiful, I am amazed how you made it all flow together. The talent you put into this is amazing. Keep writeing you are good.
 
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thesoupguy said...
May 1 at 10:29 am:
The poem was great, it had great rhythm! it had good figurative language like iambic pentameter.
 
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Insert Name Here said...
May 1 at 10:25 am:
This is a very inspirational poem. I loved how the rhythm just flowed perfectly. They way you compaired God and the whale moved me. I loved how you used free verse instead of rhyme which is way over used. I just loved it.
 
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maggie_m said...
May 1 at 10:24 am:
Great job! I liked the metaphor you used and the different stanzas were good to. keep writing!
 
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Pinhead Larry said...
May 1 at 10:22 am:
Your poem has great rhythm, and it sounded like Shakespear's iambic pentameter.
 
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sydzue said...
May 1 at 7:51 am:
Your poem was really good, very expresive, very convincing, very inspriring! In each verse I could see what you meant clearly! All the metaphors were heard, and expressed your thoughts greatly.
 
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IndiloveThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 1 at 7:49 am:
This is truly amazing! Great work its so deep I could really feel all the emotion you put into this. It's so true too! This is just so awesome completly and truly ur an amazing writer
 
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Fia-fiaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 12 at 3:27 pm:
Inspiring, beautiful and all around amazing. This is lovely. The rhythm is fantastic and the poem itself is moving. Great perspective.. Thank you :)
 
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raindance72This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 7:30 pm:
Beautiful. I LOVE this poem - it is so well worded and flows along beautifully. Don't stop writing - ever! You have potential to be great. Also, would anyone consider looking at my work and posting some comments? I could REALLY use the feedback! :)
 
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itstoohardtothink said...
Sept. 2, 2011 at 6:03 pm:
I think a poem can communicate a feeling before you've even understood the word properly, just by the rhythm and structure.  Yours is so somber and melancholy, it's as if it's written in blue.
 
Ada D. This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 7:41 pm :
I totally agree! It does seem like it was written in blue...
 
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Ayme S. This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 19, 2011 at 12:09 pm:
I can only say: woah!
 
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Audrey M. said...
May 15, 2011 at 7:23 am:
This reminds me of one of my favorite songs - Broken Horse by Freelance Whales. It's a beautiful poem with great language - keep it up!
 
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babyfacejack said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:27 pm:
this poem has good figurative language and good imagery and i like whales
 
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Dragongal said...
Mar. 10, 2011 at 5:41 pm:
I wish for the same thing at times. Keep writing, this is an amazing piece of work.
 
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TheContentedWanderer94 said...
Jan. 3, 2011 at 7:54 am:
Okay, This was truely beautiful! I am also a lover of whales and this was exactly what I thought of them. The best part for me was your phrasing and language. Keep Writing!
 
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kneller42 said...
Nov. 20, 2010 at 9:41 pm:
you words are proof that we are not evolutions mistake  keep going
 
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Alexia.Y said...
May 28, 2010 at 12:40 pm:
really, enormously beautiful.
 
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nancy19 said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 12:12 pm:
Good poem. it was different but i liked it
 
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Eric D. said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 9:09 am:
good poem i like the line when you ask If we are evolutions mistake?
 
raindance72This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 7:30 pm :
So do I! Beautiful poem.
 
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scarletP said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 8:15 pm:
it's interesting, when i was sitting by the ocean with my dad he explained the reason we feel so calm near the water is because of the sound of the waves...it's the same sound we hear when we are in the womb. Your words are very true and very deep...I however do not believe that our race was a mistake, we are evil and vile as well as graceful and endearing. Beautiful poem.
 
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bmmszw said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 10:35 am:
this poem was great good words
 
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BMMSJB said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 10:34 am:
This poem takes me through wonder. I never really thought of the whales before reading this. It does touch my heart. I would have to say though, it could be better, this was constructive, but a little more rhyme/alliteration. But good. Great job.
 
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annkaykay2011This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 9:38 am:
My favorite part
"What were you saying? Were you speaking through god?
Are you god?
I think we should worship you.
You blinked your eyes slowly, and your tears melted
with the ocean
We drank your blood with greedy slurps.
Are we evolution’s mistake?"
Its really deep and very beautiful.
Its calming but its really sad but it makes people think.
Keep it up.=]
 
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WriterFanatic This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 11:41 pm:
Wow. Yeah, sometimes when I see pictures of cut down rainforests and polluted air, I feel the same way. Odd isn't it? How sometimes the greatest stranger is your own kind?
 
BMMSJB replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 10:36 am :
Yes, I completely agree with you. Completely. I am not even a person who is obsessed with saving the environment, but I do believe that we should stop killing whales.
 
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Nicole B. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 3, 2009 at 10:47 pm:
This is magnificent. You truly have a mastery over words - at once majestic and gentle.
 
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ariwrites94 said...
Nov. 11, 2009 at 5:36 pm:
Hey, wonderful work!!! this is amazing . . . U write beautifuly so continue writing!!! also plz check out my poem called "Sensitive Am I" and it would be appreciated a comment and a rating, thankx! and keep up the good work!!!
 
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Aleece said...
Nov. 11, 2009 at 1:36 pm:
This is soooooooooooooo good. I love it! Check out my poem "All grown up" by Aleece
 
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MoyruhJO This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 20, 2009 at 1:40 am:
I really like this, and I'm not usually one for environmental matters, so that's quite a feat :] And I have to say...the voice of God aspect REALLY reminded me of Moby Dick >.<
 
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SilverDawn said...
Jun. 1, 2009 at 1:38 am:
When I read the title, I never imagined the poem would be anything as amazing as this. It sounds so quiet but still powerful. Love it! (:
 
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Meghan said...
May 31, 2009 at 11:50 pm:
Great poem! You have real talent. Keep writing.
I hate to do this but I want to hear some comments on my poems and how they could be improved so can someone please read them?
 
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tinkerbell<3er said...
May 31, 2009 at 5:33 pm:
this is really good
 
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Sydney M.This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 31, 2009 at 2:40 pm:
This is good!!!!! Amazing. but always remember that God is God and he speaks through us and not whales
 
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Samwise said...
Apr. 28, 2009 at 2:05 am:
Wow. Incredible. Stunning! This is without doubt the best poem i have ever read...
 
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CarolThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 16, 2009 at 4:13 pm:
Your poem was great. I never given much thought to what humanity does to creatures, i guess it's time everyone started realizing. But either way, I loved your poem. :)
 
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dot.! said...
Apr. 11, 2009 at 2:21 pm:
this is an amazing poem! seriously i loved it! i also love whales and feel strongly about that like you. i wish i could write like that! can you please tell me what you think about my poem?? http://www.teenink.com/raw/Poetry/article/91361/Trapped thanks!
 
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Hillary said...
Apr. 7, 2009 at 11:02 pm:
Gosh, that was AMAZING. I love whales and you pretty much took the words right out of my mouth. I recently wrote a poem that's some what similar to yours, but definatly not as good. This poem made me speechless.
 
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CloudedCrystal said...
Apr. 4, 2009 at 2:33 am:
I couldn't have said any better, heck, i probably couldn't have said it nearly as well. You took this topic and totally made it something to attract the reader. Very well written. Luved it!
 
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Jenna B. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 1, 2009 at 10:42 pm:
Really nice. :]
It's pleasant to read but it's haunting at the same time. Best of both worlds.
 
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Jessica D. said...
Mar. 31, 2009 at 10:15 pm:
This has SUCH a good message behind it.
I'm glad I came across it.
 
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~:goddessofwriting:~ said...
Mar. 27, 2009 at 6:09 pm:
I totally agree with you! A nice way to inform many people about this problem. good writing:)
 
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Sheebs said...
Mar. 25, 2009 at 9:28 pm:
This is a good poem and could be interpeted many ways.
 
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