Birthday Wishes MAG

October 22, 2014
By Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
46 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."


At the end of my lighter –
a flame.
Hover over the candles,
share my little flame
with each one.
Soon a myriad
of small blazing beacons
warm my nose and rosy cheeks.
Thin tendrils
of acrid smoke
drifting upwards, ever closer.
Take a deep breath,
hold it in.
Then make your wish.
Hush –
Don’t tell me,
but keep it in.
Never ever let it go.
Like the rush of air
you’ve just released –
gone forever.
And as it left,
it took the light.
One by one they lost their life.
And now we’re left in darkness.



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on Mar. 10 2015 at 4:35 pm
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
46 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."

Thanks @authoress17! I always enjoy reading your work too, as well as your comments ;) You keep on writing too!!

on Mar. 10 2015 at 4:33 pm
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
46 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."

Thank you @MissEmilyDickinson :D Your support and words of encouragement really keep me going and keep me motivated :)

on Feb. 27 2015 at 11:57 am
authoress17 SILVER, Evans City, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If there is no such thing as magic...then what is writing?."-authoress17 (me)

Beautiful work as always! :) This was so sad, but contained tons of emotion. So simple, yet so deep. Congratulations on being published. That is so awesome and you deserve it. I am so happy for you. I truly enjoy your work and I mean that. Thank you for posting this wonderful piece. Keep on writing!

on Feb. 26 2015 at 2:42 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

This is absolutely beautiful, @Nightingale74! I find this rather sad, but just extremely beautiful and full of emotion. It has such a beautiful complexity and simplicity at the same time, if that makes sense. I know I've said this before, but you are truly a wonderful and talented and beautiful person and writer, filled with light and beauty and talent and so much more. Congratulations for this being published and you getting published! You, truly, truly deserve it and I am proud of you and happy for you, even if I do not know you well. Thank you so much for sharing this, my friend!

on Feb. 1 2015 at 11:36 am
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
46 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."

Thank you so much!!! :D

on Feb. 1 2015 at 9:33 am
bewareofbunnyrabbits SILVER, Winona, Minnesota
8 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Empty yourself and let the universe fill you." -Yogi Tea

WOW I love it :D

on Nov. 18 2014 at 7:57 pm
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
46 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."

Thank you so much for your comment, Liv! You know, to be honest, it helped me see my poem in a new way :) I think it's interesting how poetry is like that; one poem can mean so many different things to different people. It's incredible! :D

on Nov. 18 2014 at 5:19 pm
Bronwyn-Sophronia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
316 articles 10 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

This is really spectral and sacrifical sounding, which is unique, and I love it! The way you used the words and descriptions bring to mind a sacred oath or ceremony where the lives of light in order to make your wish come true. I truly loved it, and congratulations on getting an editor's choice for it! Keep up the good work :)


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