Fifteen steps MAG

June 21, 2014
By ems1dream BRONZE, Kalama, Washington
ems1dream BRONZE, Kalama, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Alis volat propriis." -Unknown


Fifteen steps from
the splintering red front door
slouched at my back,
only wind can come
to disrupt the newfound silence
and blanket its body on nothing more
than a tuft of weathered grass
and a sunburnt daffodil clump.

I rest my burdened feet
where the sidewalk and angel bed
cohabitate, encroaching over each other,
where concrete
warms a chilled heart, my own,
and the ground where it's buried and spread
to keep my best friend company,
my first dog, Lucky.

Hide me under the leaves
of the ripened dogwood tree
that shrouds this grave.
These darkness thieves
taught the
younger me –
I am merely a bullet full of ashes
plummeting to burning ground.


The author's comments:
I learned from a young age what it felt like to lose those closest to me- my grandparents, family friends, and my very first dog.

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on Sep. 17 2014 at 8:54 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Oh, wow. This is amazing. Your poem is full of emotion and you. It has so much in it. You're very descriptive in your poem, and I like that. It's absoutely wonderful. You have a talent in you, I hope you know that. This is just all in all, wonderful. Thank you for sharing this! Also, congrats on having this already published! ^_^

on Sep. 17 2014 at 8:19 pm
GonzaloTovilla BRONZE, Richardson, Texas
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"In writing, you must kill all your darlings?"
-William Faulkner

I actually think, contrary to Michael's comment, that your poem does not have flow because it doesn't need flow. Its beauty is in its poignant description. This is a vey good poem Emily. Keep it going girl!

on Sep. 17 2014 at 8:14 pm
Necromancer PLATINUM, Cedar Creek, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Live life like There is no tomorrow"

**than that it looks good

on Sep. 17 2014 at 8:13 pm
Necromancer PLATINUM, Cedar Creek, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Live life like There is no tomorrow"

It looks great but i think you should work on the flow of your poems other


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