A man, now MAG

May 15, 2014
By nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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Blades and slits
and grimy bits
They told me
to let you
fall

Leaving slow to
let you know that
lingering is
acce
pt
a
bl
e

Weariness
and pale white fist
and crimson
kiss'd
now
I'm a man

A man, but
what have
I done

strong like
a
man, if I have
no soul?



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on Nov. 25 2014 at 9:48 am
Enigmapleet BRONZE, Calicut,kerala, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Believe in yourself.........

i thnk dis one is the best so far i hav read...it jst let us thnk deeply

on Aug. 2 2014 at 10:20 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

This is also, very DESCRIPTIVE and AMAZINGLY written. The words in your poem is woven, so well. Your poem is also powerful. Thank you for sharing this!

on Jul. 28 2014 at 3:28 am
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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THANK YOU AHHH YOUR WORK IS AMAZING I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU ARE COMMENTING this is such an honor thank you 

on Jul. 28 2014 at 3:28 am
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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thank you thank you! i feel so honored thank you

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jul. 27 2014 at 8:38 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

This is unbelievable. Definitely going in my favorite list, which is a list of solely elite poems. I love the structure (yes, I'm one of those people who look at the structure; I'm a very visual person). I relish the rhetorical question at the end; a question I ask myself just about every living day in my life. I enjoy the simplicty of the emotion carried throughout the poem; or so it seems simple to the simple-minded. However, I see and find someone almost at war with himself, lost in his consciousness, wandering around the labrynth of Life. I really like how it rolls off the tongue; there's rhyme and rhythm—subtle—but it's there. Really well done. Write more stuff like this. 

on Jul. 27 2014 at 8:31 am
TheComet PLATINUM, Mostaganem, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Speak when you are angry and you will make the best speech you will ever regret" -Ambrose Bierce
" Be yourself! Everybody else is already taken ;)"
"Don't go where the path leads you. Go instead where there's no path and leave a trail ;)"-R.W.Emerson

I cannot find words to describe this poem! I'm speechless! It was so incredibly deep and powerful. I loved it when you ended up with a fake question cuz actually the answer is quiet obvious so it's kinda a doubt, right? Anyways! Defenitly 5 satrs :D carry on just like that and you'll soon reach the highest tops ;)

on Jul. 27 2014 at 1:19 am
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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thanks so much ahhh this means a lot

on Jul. 22 2014 at 7:25 pm
spiritwriter GOLD, Hicksville, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"It's not a matter of "can I change the world," it's about "how do I want to change the world?""
-Severn Cullis-Suzuki

great poem: DEFINITELY needs a trigger warning though! 

on Jul. 20 2014 at 5:19 pm
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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Thanks so much!

on Jul. 12 2014 at 4:17 pm
Ariel_Fluffyy SILVER, Los Angeles, California
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Favorite Quote:
"You May Encounter Many Defeats But You Must Not Be Defeated" By- Dr. Maya Angelou

This a very AWESOME piece! 

on Jun. 21 2014 at 2:30 am
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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thank you! means a lot.

HudaZav SILVER said...
on Jun. 13 2014 at 9:42 am
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

What a deep poem! I love the way you arranged the stanzas, and the last line hit me hard. Well done!

on May. 31 2014 at 10:39 pm
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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lol sheefo thanks

on May. 26 2014 at 12:54 am
Prestidigitation, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"What."--Someone Probably

Wow this is surprisingly deep 4u dude 8^D I really liked the line(s) "strong like a man, if I have no soul?" zomg

on May. 21 2014 at 7:22 pm
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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thanks! :)

Dezarae SILVER said...
on May. 21 2014 at 10:27 am
Dezarae SILVER, Wentzville, Missouri
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the way the stanzas were set up really contributed to the mood of the poem

on May. 19 2014 at 6:44 pm
nithyaswaminathan BRONZE, Pleasanton, California
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thank you so much

.king. SILVER said...
on May. 18 2014 at 2:18 pm
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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Favorite Quote:
( ͡~ ͜ʖ ͡°)

Swell definition to the heavy tone. Applause for the badge well-derseved! CX




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