Flame MAG

December 1, 2008
By Karah J., Schnecksville, PA, Schnecksville, PA

I watch this flame pass
from match to wick,
gently stepping over
a great divide.
This flame and I
are not so different:
it comes into being from nothingness;
it eats and grows, smokes, and rests.
It gets angry,
destroys homes,
consumes flesh.
Sated, it becomes calm,
retreats into coals,
smoldering through the night.
Domesticated
by a piece of string,
it makes its home in a cave of wax.
It chases the shadows away
and stands watch through the night.
It sways
and dances in the darkness
before it is extinguished
in the blink
of an eye.


The author's comments:
What inspired me to write this was: my life resembles a candle light. Bright at times, then it completely turns around and I feel dark, sad, and abandoned. I hope whoever reads this will feel what I felt, and not judge, but understand. Thank you.

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on Sep. 7 2010 at 1:22 pm
just-a-joy GOLD, Indianapolis, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Eminem: Success is my only option, failure's not

literally this piece is hot i love the way ur words came 2gether

S. said...
on Sep. 7 2010 at 8:56 am
Beautiful! However, I suggest taking out the line about the flame and you being not so different. The poem expresses that on it's own, so you don't really need to state it directly. But that's just my opinion.

on Jul. 25 2010 at 9:12 pm
clairexaudrey PLATINUM, Bethel, Connecticut
41 articles 3 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The most beautiful people we have known are those who have known defeat, known suffering, known struggle, known loss, and have found their way out of the depths. These persons have an appreciation, a sensitivity, and an understanding of life that fills them with compassion, gentleness, and a deep loving concern. Beautiful people do not just happen."
-Elizabeth Kubler Ross

129 people have commented on this so I don't want to sound repetitive, but this was absolutely beautiful.

on Jul. 25 2010 at 12:54 pm
WannaBeWriternumbertwo BRONZE, Brooklyn Park, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"If you cannot read this, please ask the flight attendant for assistance."
United Airlines Flight Safety Brochure
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wow............wonderful.

on Jul. 25 2010 at 8:58 am
inksplatters21 SILVER, Mason, Ohio
6 articles 0 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Character is how you live when no one is watching."

I can picture the candle.  this is beautiful, and an awesome poem.  Anyone want to read my stuff?  thanks!

on Jul. 4 2010 at 3:38 am
musiclover123, ., Other
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Favorite Quote:
It is cruel, you know, that music should be so beautiful. It has the beauty of loneliness of pain: of strength and freedom. The beauty of disappointment and never-satisfied love. The cruel beauty of nature and everlasting beauty of monotony. <3

wow

Fire has always fascinated me,and this poem does too.Its got hidden meaning and you have to read between the lines to get it all.Its BEAUTIFUL.

<3


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on Jul. 3 2010 at 7:25 pm
Dakota_Lynn, Oxford, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
But that's not the point here.

Nicely done  I like it  

on Jul. 3 2010 at 6:33 pm
Acalleq PLATINUM, Togiak, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
you never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have

this was very good. im pretty fascinated with fire so this piece sorta describes myself too. fire is never really tamed and can change in an instant. ;)

on Jul. 3 2010 at 6:32 pm
EscapeVelocity GOLD, Moro, Illinois
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very good, deserves to be published

 


on Jul. 3 2010 at 11:45 am
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
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this piece was so lovely:] check out my work?

on Jun. 17 2010 at 9:34 am
trapped-in-a-broken-wonderland PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
love in it'a essence is just spiritual fire

wow, this is really good, good imagrey, i like the hidden meanings and love how i can relate to them. excellent peiece.

on Jun. 11 2010 at 3:25 pm
Reaa.Mae.Kuzyk GOLD, Arborg, Manitoba, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Why live trying to just DIE, when people are DYING just for the chance to LIVE."
-Anomynous

"Time has a wonderful way of showing us what really matters."
- Margaret Peters

Loved it. :) Keep writing. :D

on Jun. 11 2010 at 10:01 am
livsinthecity SILVER, Toronto, Ontario
6 articles 13 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love means never having to say you are sorry.
-Erich Segal (in Love Story)

you defimitely put out the flame....i love the imagery....keep lighting your flame of poetry!!

HannaHBoo said...
on Jun. 11 2010 at 8:11 am
Wow. That is a powerful piece. Keep writing!

mhw582 GOLD said...
on Jun. 7 2010 at 10:29 pm
mhw582 GOLD, Concord, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Who ever loved that loved not at first sight?" -Christopher Marlowe

i love this. don't let anyone tell you that what you're writing is wrong - if it makes sense to you then it is right.

i love the imagery associated with "it chases shadows away and stands watch through the night"... like a silent guardian.

keep writing :).


Eilatan GOLD said...
on May. 20 2010 at 7:00 pm
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

I do not judge. I understand.

on May. 20 2010 at 6:43 pm
olympian-queen, Charleston, South Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yesterday is history. Tommorrow is a mystery. And today? Today is a gift that's why they call it the present.

you definatley put  the flame out..... this isn't very clear but i like the concept.

on May. 20 2010 at 5:48 pm
avidDreamwriter BRONZE, Ridgeville, South Carolina
3 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Not all those who wander are lost"- J.R.R. Tolkein's Lord of The Rings

There was no need for all the flame. It makes me think you're a pyrophile.

on May. 20 2010 at 4:13 pm
ElijahN PLATINUM, Livonia, Michigan
31 articles 0 photos 150 comments

Favorite Quote:
"only after you've lost everything, that you're free to do anything."-Tyler Durdan -Fight Club-

thank you, I'll comment on one of yours as well when I have time.

on May. 20 2010 at 4:01 pm
Its.beautiful. BRONZE, Goose Creek, South Carolina
1 article 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Immature love says: 'I love you because I need you.' Mature love says 'I need you because I love you." — Erich Fromm

Alright fire fighter. Obviously this career isn't working for you. Maybe...Chef.

 





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