Flame This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

December 1, 2008
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I watch this flame pass
from match to wick,
gently stepping over
a great divide.
This flame and I
are not so different:
it comes into being from nothingness;
it eats and grows, smokes, and rests.
It gets angry,
destroys homes,
consumes flesh.
Sated, it becomes calm,
retreats into coals,
smoldering through the night.
Domesticated
by a piece of string,
it makes its home in a cave of wax.
It chases the shadows away
and stands watch through the night.
It sways
and dances in the darkness
before it is extinguished
in the blink
of an eye.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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Dax533 said...
Jul. 3, 2010 at 6:32 pm

very good, deserves to be published

 

 
xovanillatwilightxo This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 3, 2010 at 11:45 am
this piece was so lovely:] check out my work?
 
psychokidd said...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 9:34 am
wow, this is really good, good imagrey, i like the hidden meanings and love how i can relate to them. excellent peiece.
 
~Reaa.Mae.Kuzyk~ said...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 3:25 pm
Loved it. :) Keep writing. :D
 
palak said...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 10:01 am
you defimitely put out the flame....i love the imagery....keep lighting your flame of poetry!!
 
HannaHBoo said...
Jun. 11, 2010 at 8:11 am
Wow. That is a powerful piece. Keep writing!
 
mhw582 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 10:29 pm

i love this. don't let anyone tell you that what you're writing is wrong - if it makes sense to you then it is right.

i love the imagery associated with "it chases shadows away and stands watch through the night"... like a silent guardian.

keep writing :).

 
Eilatan This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 20, 2010 at 7:00 pm
I do not judge. I understand.
 
demetria said...
May 20, 2010 at 6:43 pm
you definatley put  the flame out..... this isn't very clear but i like the concept.
 
Beth K. said...
May 20, 2010 at 5:48 pm
There was no need for all the flame. It makes me think you're a pyrophile.
 
callie15 replied...
Mar. 24, 2011 at 6:40 pm
did you, by any chance, read the author's comment about this poem? that might clear some things up for you...
 
Ummm...shutup said...
May 20, 2010 at 4:01 pm

Alright fire fighter. Obviously this career isn't working for you. Maybe...Chef.

 

 
Patience97 said...
May 20, 2010 at 2:38 pm
I really like this and it makes me feel like I understand you. Good job :)
 
ElijahNoble replied...
May 20, 2010 at 3:20 pm
how does a poem get so many comments like this?
 
Patience97 replied...
May 20, 2010 at 3:23 pm
What do you mean? It's unique, and it has a hidden meaning, when you look closely at the words you can see it... Try to have an open mind.
 
ElijahNoble replied...
May 20, 2010 at 3:24 pm
huh? I meant in general, I'm asking how do you get somebody to look at your work. you thought I was dissing this poem? I gave it a 5/5.
 
Patience97 replied...
May 20, 2010 at 3:27 pm

Oh yea... I thought you were so I tried to defend it... :) Haha

Well I really have no idea because I was never published in a magizine. I only had a few people look at my stuff and they are people I know.

Hbu? Yea it is hard to get people to notice you on here.

 
Patience97 replied...
May 20, 2010 at 3:31 pm
I commented on one of your poems. I really liked it :)
 
ElijahNoble replied...
May 20, 2010 at 4:13 pm
thank you, I'll comment on one of yours as well when I have time.
 
through_my_eyes replied...
Oct. 21, 2010 at 5:28 pm

I don't think it has 100% to do with it being unique. Some people may also want something to relate to. i guess its 50 50. 

I feel sorta dumb jumping into a conversation, but oh well.

 
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