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We’re hanging on a gossamer thread of lies and fairy-tale dreams.
You’re Alice in Wonderland; a cheshire in a tree
Set adrift in the sea of doubt
Laced with traces of the harsh reality
I’m a mouse in a maze of mind
e’re chasing the cheese
Spinner of fate, the web shorn
Bitter tears of regret; things realized too late
The mad queen paints blood on roses and tears up dreams
chasing a disillusioned reality
Trapped of own; wished free
Lost and alone
in my cave of mind
my cave of mind
one and my own

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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SLEEPY42 said...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 5:08 pm:
YALL HAVE SUM VERY GUD POEMS
 
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elflako003 said...
Sept. 15, 2010 at 9:29 pm:
luv this poem.. is so good and understandable and true..
 
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LuvKirstyn14 said...
Aug. 2, 2010 at 12:36 pm:
Really good poem, and so true! Plz check out my work, it will be highly appreciated :)
 
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Sumana2 said...
Jun. 19, 2010 at 3:38 pm:
This was realy good, u made the ramdom thoughts flow very well.
 
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unfamil-LIAR-minds said...
Jan. 16, 2010 at 2:02 pm:
There's something so unique about the way this poem explains itself. I loved it. Please continue to write things like that.
 
Sachi-San replied...
Feb. 4, 2010 at 7:23 pm :
I also like the style you used. It is very different and flows well. ^^
 
closed-in replied...
Feb. 8, 2010 at 12:36 pm :
i like it keep on writing
 
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Paig3Cagl3 said...
Nov. 9, 2009 at 2:47 pm:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
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Sumana2 replied...
Jun. 19, 2010 at 3:36 pm :
You are a Spammer.
 
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poetry.is.wonderful said...
Oct. 20, 2009 at 8:04 pm:
your words are well put, & the way you used your knowledge to prove your point is brilliant. you defiantly got talent, keep reaching im sure you'll be famous for your work
-nata
 
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S.E.M This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 26, 2009 at 3:27 am:
This is brilliant. You're very talented with the poetry flow... Five stars!
What really got to me was the way the title contrasts with the content, and yet makes perfect sense. It's beautiful.
~S.E.M
 
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In_Love_LovedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 26, 2009 at 1:37 am:
This is REALLY good. I get the whole image. Keep writing!
 
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Hillary said...
Aug. 25, 2009 at 9:29 pm:
this is hella good!
check mine out?http://www.teenink.com/raw/Poetry/article/126059/Evils-Playground/
 
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KyleS. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 25, 2009 at 8:12 pm:
That's also the name of the album.
 
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lemons_r_crazy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 25, 2009 at 1:04 pm:
I loved this poem! The first line really pulled me in, it's very magical and all very true!
 
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Tears2RosesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 15, 2009 at 10:40 pm:
Wow! Soooooooo Cool you have a way with words!
(There is a song called Comatose by SKILLET look um up if you want, there my favret band!)
 
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