Comatose MAG

November 19, 2008
By Clarissa Lee, Highland Village, TX

We’re hanging on a gossamer thread of lies and fairy-tale dreams.
You’re Alice in Wonderland; a cheshire in a tree
Set adrift in the sea of doubt
Laced with traces of the harsh reality
I’m a mouse in a maze of mind
e’re chasing the cheese
Spinner of fate, the web shorn
Bitter tears of regret; things realized too late
The mad queen paints blood on roses and tears up dreams
chasing a disillusioned reality
Trapped of own; wished free
Lost and alone
in my cave of mind
my cave of mind
one and my own


The author's comments:
random thoughts and inspirational bits about people who are corrupted by others and unbeknownst to them, encourage the monsters inside to grow and claw at their minds. :3

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SLEEPY42 said...
on Jun. 28 2011 at 5:08 pm
YALL HAVE SUM VERY GUD POEMS

elflako003 said...
on Sep. 15 2010 at 9:29 pm
luv this poem.. is so good and understandable and true..

on Aug. 2 2010 at 12:36 pm
KirstynAlexandra PLATINUM, Baltimore, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
\"I\'m selfish, impatient and a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control and at times hard to handle. But if you can\'t handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don\'t deserve me at my best.\"
— Marilyn Monroe

Imagination is more important than knowledge...
Albert Einstein

Really good poem, and so true! Plz check out my work, it will be highly appreciated :)

on Jun. 19 2010 at 3:38 pm
Meavescrete SILVER, Potomac, Maryland
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This was realy good, u made the ramdom thoughts flow very well.

on Jun. 19 2010 at 3:36 pm
Meavescrete SILVER, Potomac, Maryland
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You are a Spammer.

closed-in said...
on Feb. 8 2010 at 12:36 pm
i like it keep on writing

Sachi-San said...
on Feb. 4 2010 at 7:23 pm
I also like the style you used. It is very different and flows well. ^^

on Jan. 16 2010 at 2:02 pm
Ms.Understood, Laramie, Wyoming
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There's something so unique about the way this poem explains itself. I loved it. Please continue to write things like that.

on Nov. 9 2009 at 2:47 pm
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
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This poem has great flow and insight.

I really enjoyed it.

Lovely poem darling =]

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on Oct. 20 2009 at 8:04 pm
your words are well put, & the way you used your knowledge to prove your point is brilliant. you defiantly got talent, keep reaching im sure you'll be famous for your work

-nata

on Aug. 26 2009 at 3:27 am
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."

This is brilliant. You're very talented with the poetry flow... Five stars!

What really got to me was the way the title contrasts with the content, and yet makes perfect sense. It's beautiful.

~S.E.M

on Aug. 26 2009 at 1:37 am
In_Love_Loved PLATINUM, Concord, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"I've lost my faith in so many things but I still believe in you." -Sanctus Real

This is REALLY good. I get the whole image. Keep writing!

Hillary SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 9:29 pm
Hillary SILVER, Concord, California
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KyleS. GOLD said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 8:12 pm
KyleS. GOLD, Lake Tapps, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
I will not say do not weep, for not all tears are in evil.

That's also the name of the album.

on Aug. 25 2009 at 1:04 pm
lemons_r_crazy BRONZE, Holdenville, Oklahoma
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I loved this poem! The first line really pulled me in, it's very magical and all very true!

on Aug. 15 2009 at 10:40 pm
RadioShower PLATINUM, Rio Rancho, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
Emo is imaginary - Gerard Way
Normalness leads to sadness -Phil Lester (AmazingPhil)

Wow! Soooooooo Cool you have a way with words!

(There is a song called Comatose by SKILLET look um up if you want, there my favret band!)


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