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Seasons

April 1, 2014
By Nobuo GOLD, Dio, Missouri
Nobuo GOLD, Dio, Missouri
16 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hello


Step..step
The sun covers my face
But the warmth..
It passes me by
To carry petals
In their dance

Silence
Skin and bone
Have nothing more to say
Tears of sweat
Go up in smoke

Crack to crunch
Doesn't matter
Frozen dreams won't stop their fall
Just the way it is

Now..
I don't feel
I've gone numb
Let me howl in peace



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on Apr. 19 2014 at 12:53 am
jacey_poo BRONZE, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
never judge a book by its cover

This is great, I love the emotion, keep writing

Nobuo GOLD said...
on Apr. 11 2014 at 1:31 pm
Nobuo GOLD, Dio, Missouri
16 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hello

What do you mean by ellipsis? Please tell me how I can change it

on Apr. 11 2014 at 11:36 am
JacobTheOrdinary PLATINUM, Rancho Cucamonga, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Fiction is the lie that tells the truth."

The poem is nice. I'd appreciate it if you used an ellipsis instead of just two periods. . . That's the only critizism I have. I'm expecting more now, so keep writing.

HudaZav SILVER said...
on Apr. 9 2014 at 6:05 pm
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
8 articles 6 photos 390 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

That first stanza got me hooked right away. I love that the title is simple, but the poem is very elaborate. Good imagery, great job!

on Apr. 7 2014 at 1:23 pm
iimoeloveii GOLD, Augusta, Georgia
14 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
IF YOU CAN'T HANG THEN THERE'S THE DOOR-SLEEPING WITH SIRENS

Great poem keep writing