Passerby

February 12, 2014
By Authorintraining88 GOLD, Somewhere:p, Massachusetts
Authorintraining88 GOLD, Somewhere:p, Massachusetts
11 articles 1 photo 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
You are the universe experiencing itself


I kiss your lips, if only once.
A glimpse of love,
a taste of trust.

Your eyes cling to mine,
as you study the way I see the world.
All you know is darkness.

This moment of light is broken.
An unrelenting shadow returns to you,
eating away at your faith.

I scream.
For you.
For me.
For us.

The pain will never let you breathe,
allow you to escape from the bonds of before.

I feel you struggle to stay,
to resist the urge to give in.

No words slip past your trembling lips,
still you try to smile.
Your desire to hold on is strong as you hold my hand and bring me close.

Yet I watched you go that day,
shaking as you walked out the door.
The last time I would see you leave.

I felt as if you would be in my life forever.
Thought you could continue on if I was there.

Now I see you were only passing by.


The author's comments:
I am new to poetry, so please comment any advice you might have! I appreciate it! :)

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on Jul. 26 2014 at 6:53 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

This is a sad, but amazingly written poem! Keep writing, please! Thank you, for sharing this!

on Feb. 17 2014 at 8:38 pm
haley101 DIAMOND, Windsor, Connecticut
70 articles 5 photos 195 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Someone I loved once gave me a box full of darkness. It took me years to understand that this too, was a gift.”

― Mary Oliver

I really like this. It's so inspiring and it reminded me of my poem, The Conversation of Lovers and The Better Lovers. I'd love your feedback on those!  

JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Feb. 17 2014 at 1:52 pm
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
43 articles 10 photos 527 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you."

"Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, 'I just don't care.'?"

Absolutely beautiful :)

Blynn SILVER said...
on Feb. 17 2014 at 11:08 am
Blynn SILVER, Waco, Texas
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Great poem!!

on Feb. 17 2014 at 10:57 am
Authorintraining88 GOLD, Somewhere:p, Massachusetts
11 articles 1 photo 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
You are the universe experiencing itself

Awuh thank you so much! It means alot (:

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Feb. 16 2014 at 10:51 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

This is gorgeous! Wonderful word choice and vivid imagery. You're really strong when in comes to emotion, making the reader feel what you feel. You're a brilliant writer, and I hope to read more form you! :)

on Feb. 16 2014 at 10:30 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
1 article 0 photos 274 comments

Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

This is very emotional i love it!!

on Feb. 16 2014 at 6:14 pm
Authorintraining88 GOLD, Somewhere:p, Massachusetts
11 articles 1 photo 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
You are the universe experiencing itself

Thank you!!

on Feb. 16 2014 at 4:51 pm
MidnightMoanerMonroe GOLD, Dacula, Georgia
10 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." - Dr. Seuss

this is beatiful, and heatwrenching. i love it and it almost made me cry. well done.


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