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A dark place
Never ending
Begging for it to
Nothing but
No one speaks
But thoughts are enough to
You cry
No one is there

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elycavill This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 1, 2014 at 3:59 pm
As reading this had an association on Pablo( Diego José Francisco de Paula Juan Nepomuceno María de los Remedios Cipriano de la Santísima Trinidad Ruiz y ) Picasso haha. I like the simple method of enumeration u used. It made it clear and easy to read but still all the words remained standing strong. Nice :)
amk7997 replied...
Feb. 2, 2014 at 7:36 pm
thank you !! I know that I need to add more imagery but I appreciate that you liked the simplicity :)
live_luv_laugh_inspire said...
Jan. 17, 2014 at 4:45 pm
Aw, this is a sad poem and I'm sorry you had to go through this, but I like the way it was written, and that you used nouns like "torture, "tears," "silent," to emphasize the poems point. I might suggest some more imagery and descriptiveness, but good job!
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