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Cotton Candy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

puffs of sweet fiberglass
dissolve into pink crystals
on the pinnacle of my tongue.

they fall like tickled icicles
puncturing the walls
of my abdomen.

still I consume
the addicting substance,
permitting my body
to slowly commit suicide.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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nathanielmcd said...
Aug. 30, 2011 at 9:45 am:
Hey, um are you actually talking about cotton candy? or are you just talking about fiberglass? I honesly did not even know that people even ate fiberglass.
 
nathanielmcd replied...
Sept. 9, 2011 at 12:34 pm :
Wow, that makes a lot more sense, thank you for the clarification.
 
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Lola_Black said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 5:06 pm:
Sweet! I love how you turned cotton candy into a metaphor for drugs (fiber glass does look like cotton candy, doesn't it?) Brilliantly writen! (and if you don't mind, please read some of my poems! Thanks)
 
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Blue4 said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 7:34 pm:

Interesting take on cotton candy, cool poem.

Can someone look at my attempts at poetry ("the violinist" and "for what have all these people died",) rate, and comment, please. I need the feedback.

 
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EnigmaticBeing said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 4:36 pm:
I love how you turned cotton candy into a metaphor. This poem was beautifully executed. Well done.
 
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i<3m said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 4:32 pm:
tat drug comment was stupied and the poem was nice butt i was a little confuesd
 
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DeepCee said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 1:57 pm:
this is a beautiful poem.
 
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purplequeen said...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 9:55 am:
Great job! Please comment on mine! and I will comment on yours!Comment on mine guys!!!!!!!
 
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wisher14 said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 8:44 pm:
This poem is really deep and feels like its talking about a lot more than cotton candy! I love how discriptive it is!
 
Book_addict replied...
Aug. 8, 2011 at 11:39 am :
I second this comment.  This is an awesome poem!
 
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Shyzilla said...
Jul. 17, 2011 at 9:33 pm:
i like how it goes so in depth and inludes so much detail for something simple as cotton candy(:
 
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Laura_Oliver said...
Jul. 17, 2011 at 5:28 pm:

Somebody likes cotton candy! (^_^)

If you have time, check out my other free verse poem, "True Colors", and leave feedback!

 
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introducingshelby said...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 6:01 pm:
Mm, I can see why this is top rated..
 
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renni said...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 12:00 pm:
great job :D loved it
 
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Dodson said...
Jun. 3, 2011 at 8:58 pm:
great job! although its not long i was guessing what it meant untill the last stanza.
 
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jfed23 said...
Jun. 3, 2011 at 5:43 pm:
it was really good at first i actually thought you was talking about cotton candy but good poem i loved it
 
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writingmagic26 said...
Jun. 3, 2011 at 1:19 pm:
really discriptive!  I love your use of adjectives!!
 
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K.M.S.Shear said...
Jun. 3, 2011 at 7:54 am:

well done

 

 
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Poppy-Love said...
May 12, 2011 at 4:12 pm:
This was a wonderful peice. I love the way that you made it all sound so peaceful and cotton candy-ish
 
drivenbiimusic replied...
Jun. 3, 2011 at 7:13 am :
Ha! Cotton candy-ish. I like that. This poem  is schweeeeeeeeet!
 
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volleyball17 said...
Apr. 20, 2011 at 12:43 pm:
:) heyyyyyyy whats up haha i am hyper i a just ate ten pixy sticks ;)
 
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