The Big Mistake | Teen Ink

The Big Mistake

October 16, 2013
By BrooklynBeauty SILVER, Virginia Beach, Virginia
BrooklynBeauty SILVER, Virginia Beach, Virginia
7 articles 0 photos 0 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you believe you can achieve.
Your dreams can come true.


She sat there thinking. Just thinking about how she could approach him. Several scenarios play out though her head, but none of them turned out with her being happy. But no matter what, she had to confront him about his recent behavior around another girl. He has been doing stuff with the other girl that he doesn’t do with her. And he is starting to spend less time with her and more time with the other girl. Finally, she came up with a way to confront him. So she walked up to him and asked him, “Who is it gonna be? Me or Her?” But what he said next was what she dreaded the most. “Her” She walked away because that was the only thing she could do to keep from crying. As she walked away he said the words that could hurt her even more than what he already had. “I’m sorry. I will always love you no matter what.” But, what he didn’t know is that he had just made the biggest mistake of his life. He had just made a very dangerous enemy. She turned around and hissed at him through her tears, “How dare u break my heart and turn around and say that you’re sorry and that you love me. You are the most inconsiderate, immature jerk I have ever known.” And with that she walked away, plotting a way to get back at him.



Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 1 comment.


Mckay ELITE said...
on Aug. 27 2014 at 3:51 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I like how all your poems are connected. They're all one story. I think maybe that's what you should do. These poems are not enough "poem" for me. I feel like I'm reading a short story. My suggestion is that if these poems are all one story: you should write a short story about all of these people. If you don't want to do that, keep working with these poems to make them more poetical. They're a little too prosaic. And work on the format to make them more appealing to the reader. We are tempted by what we see. Keep it up.