"Oh."

September 1, 2013
By LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.


I smell the rain as
a liquid crystal
f a l l s.
I smear the tear
of heaven as it
m e l t s
into my skin.
It seeps into my
pale body and
f l y s.
Though soaring
quickly it's too
l a t e.
An inch from
my soul, it's
g o n e.


The author's comments:
I was told by a friend, Mckay, to never be sorry for the length of a poem. I believe that to be among some of the best advice I've received when it comes to poetry. With that being said, no explanation is needed for the length, the set-up is odd, and the meaning is something you'll only understand if you've undergone a certain experience. So, if you're lost it's okay, one day you'll remember this poem and simply say, "Oh."

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on Oct. 26 2013 at 1:56 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Liv! Have you been gone too? I ahven't been on in a very long time! I have been trying to make time for teenink and my life has been crazy hectic lately! I miss you and Mckay! I hope you're doing good:') I miss you!

on Oct. 25 2013 at 9:42 am
estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

Hey Lexus!!!! Long time! It's been RIDICULOUSLY busy lately! I actually love this, though I don't quite understand it. Yet. I love how it's short and different, yet powerful. I've read a couple more things and I'd love it if you could check the out :) Keep writing!

on Oct. 12 2013 at 9:32 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

*Pokes head in* Long time, no talk.....remember me?? Hey there Lexy-loo hows it going! I love this, Short and sweet and just awesome sauce. I miss you soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much you cant even understand you and andy and mckay and like Dua and everyone i was away for a whole month or someting but im back now hows school and life?? Hope als awesome love you!   ~Liv   btw keep rockin ;)

on Oct. 8 2013 at 5:25 pm
nelehjr DIAMOND, Lingle, Wyoming
60 articles 11 photos 381 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

So, you crossed my mind today when I was showing my bestie some of my poetry and we re-read the comment you left on "Read My Poetry!" Wow, you've really branched out! I'm so proud of you! Really though! Lovely poem! I like how you place enphisis on certain words by placing them on a line all by themselves and putting spaces in between each letter. Whoo!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 12 2013 at 6:11 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I love the format of this poem. And how some of the letters or certain words are spaced out. Thank you for taking my advice to heart. I'm moved truly. Brah, keep writing. Writing the way you want to. Doesn't matter what anyone thinks. Criticism is the opinion of another being like you and me. We don't all like the same thing. So who's to say this isn't good. I believe it's perfect the way you wrote it. 

on Sep. 10 2013 at 11:40 am
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
17 articles 0 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
May your words be sharp.
- Christopher Paolini


Nobody's going to wait for you, so do it now.
-Ingrid Michaelson


Broken hearts heal, but never the same.
- Jessica Romo

Idiots rely on luck.
-Sherlock Holmes

Lexus, it's not showing that you posted on the Valley!

on Sep. 10 2013 at 8:22 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Hey! Well, now I'm blushing. And thank you for letting me. I sure will let you know. You are amazing.

on Sep. 9 2013 at 6:02 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Thanks, Andy! Oh, btw, I'm getting to replying to the forum on The Valley asap!

on Sep. 9 2013 at 6:02 pm
LexusMarie PLATINUM, Las Cruces, New Mexico
27 articles 0 photos 423 comments

Favorite Quote:
The more control you have over yourself, the less control others have over you.

Hey! Thanks for all the sweet comments, I appreciate everything you do and say! You're too kind.. and you may write this down, absolutely! Let me know when you figure it out:) Thanks again!

on Sep. 9 2013 at 4:31 pm
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
17 articles 0 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
May your words be sharp.
- Christopher Paolini


Nobody's going to wait for you, so do it now.
-Ingrid Michaelson


Broken hearts heal, but never the same.
- Jessica Romo

Idiots rely on luck.
-Sherlock Holmes

Great job, Lexus!

on Sep. 9 2013 at 1:36 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

And awesome advice indeed from Mckay.

on Sep. 9 2013 at 1:34 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

One day I'll read it from my journal and remember Lexus wrote it and say "Oh!" ...hehehehe...Hey, you don't mind me writing it down do you...with your name of course. and well I am somewhat lost. But I do feel a certain beauty to it. Thank you for sharing it. Good read.




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