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i want you there

July 16, 2013
By Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou


when i'm showering
your warm skin
next to mine
the cold water overhead
dampening every inch
of our bare bodies
i want you there

when i'm crying
because i don't know
who or what to trust
your tender forefinger
wiping away the
misguided tears of
my lack of trust
your goofy smile
in between your dimples
vanishing my worries
as reality ebbs
for a frozen moment
i want you there

when i'm flinging
my flightless body
from this cliff
into an unknown abyss
hoping as i near
the bottom that you'll
catch me like we've
promised we'd do
for each other
i know you're there
waiting to catch me
in your arms

i want you there

i hope you're there


The author's comments:
The poem is the epilogue of To Someone I Thought I Knew...But Didn't. (By the way, there's a small inside joke in here, because I actually wrote this for someone.)

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Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 19 2013 at 11:58 am
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

1) Thank you. 2) Awe. 3). I know right? Who knows what Teenink really likes? But I'm happy they did allow this poem to be here. Thank you. Love ya, too. 

on Sep. 18 2013 at 6:49 pm
Scarlett_the_pegacorn BRONZE, Niceville, Florida
4 articles 24 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't tell me how to live my life; I do what I want.

I have just two things to say to this: 1.) Made me tear up. Seriously. 2.) I'm surprised they actually let you post this, considering the part about the shower...xD Love you, hon.

Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 2 2013 at 9:42 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thanks, dancer. That's my dream as a writer. To be able to write in more than just one genre. I appreciate that comment. 

dancer25 GOLD said...
on Aug. 21 2013 at 4:32 pm
dancer25 GOLD, West Babylon, New York
15 articles 16 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hope will never be silent'

you are a talented writer in more thsn one genre of poetry

Mckay ELITE said...
on Aug. 2 2013 at 4:04 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

That's love. I don't know much about it. Or as much as I'd like to know. But I know that it's all based on hope. There's always some layer of doubt. Even if it's as thin as an onion's skin. Thank you for the lovelovelovelove for this poem. I appreciate it as always. 

migwam ELITE said...
on Aug. 2 2013 at 12:09 am
migwam ELITE, Tumwater, Washington
240 articles 20 photos 152 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never let the future disturb you. You will meet it, if you have to, with the same weapons of reason which today arm you against the present." --Marcus Aurelius

The flinty little scrap of doubt at the very end... I love that. Through the whole poem, you want him/her there, but you recognize, it all comes down to that very last moment.. And all you can do is hope. LoveitIloveitIloveit. Tender without being overly emotional. Perfect.


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