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it's strange because i never liked the color
brown, but as i gaze into your eyes, i can't help but fall irrevocably
in love with the creamy, smooth, rich color
of mocha coffee, and i hesitate in
turning away
from you, because i don't know
if i can function completely without
the caffeine that is your eyes

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
today at 5:36 pm:
I'm hating this site right now. Until today after months, I finally saw that you had posted in my forum requesting feedback. So sorry that your post didn't appear at first. For this poem being your first piece, I must say that it's incredible. I love the concept of it. As a brown-eyed person, I couldn't agree anymore. I love how you detailed the eyes of this lover. You didn't just say yeah you got great eyes. You went into lyrical details showing why this person's eyes ar... (more »)
 
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rachelmuschettThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 13 at 9:38 pm:
Really paints a picture! Love the poem and the way in which you described the eyes and its color in such a little bit amount of words! 4/5.
 
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Avery_S said...
Jul. 9 at 6:44 pm:
Beautiful poem! Completely warms my soul.
 
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frnbanan56 said...
Jul. 9 at 6:33 pm:
I love it so much! I hope you get a lot of stars and comments :)
 
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hazeleyes8 said...
Jul. 8 at 4:31 pm:
wow this is beautiful!
 
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Maya said...
Jul. 8 at 4:02 pm:
Beautiful poem! Xoxo
 
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laurennnnn said...
Jul. 8 at 3:58 pm:
this is amazing :')
 
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TheShainTrain said...
Jul. 7 at 3:10 pm:
Oh my gosh, this is so amazing. I want this painted on my bedroom wall. Good work.
 
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Willowin said...
Jul. 7 at 5:40 am:
Wow, that was beautiful!!
 
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ielderkin339 said...
Jul. 7 at 5:26 am:
Love this!
 
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tumblrgal said...
Jul. 7 at 3:58 am:
this is beautiful. 
 
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lethargicology said...
Jul. 7 at 3:04 am:
This poem is beautifully written. It's a simple pleasure that puts looking into the eyes of someone you like into words. Good job!
 
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leah said...
Jul. 7 at 2:51 am:
i really think this is beautiful x
 
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hula said...
Jul. 6 at 6:31 pm:
you are the best<3 ily
 
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nooo00oo0o0o said...
Jul. 6 at 3:42 pm:
<3 <3 love this so much, its fantastic. 
 
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asfsjdhfkjsdhf said...
Jul. 6 at 3:27 pm:
Love this. Great poem and author! Great Job!
 
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desolait said...
Jul. 6 at 3:26 pm:
This poem is just so great, totally in love with it
 
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kaity said...
Jul. 6 at 2:20 am:
Aww what a sweet poem! I love how you compared brown eyes to mocha coffee, that's just great! :)
 
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destinybree13 said...
Jul. 6 at 2:10 am:
I love this omg
 
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ndulek said...
Jul. 5 at 10:35 pm:
I love this so much. Especially because i love coffee
 
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