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If you would care for me,
I would care for you.
If you would hold me,
I would hold you.
If you would give me a shoulder to cry on,
I would give you a shoulder to cry on.
If you would trust me,
I would trust you.
If you would love me,
I would love you.
If you told that you would never lie to me,
I would have to tell you that all I have said here is not true.
I would it all for you even,
If you would not do for me.



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Anansesem This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 6, 2013 at 9:42 pm:
I like how it seems clear what you want until the last couple of lines, which is nothing but someone to care for.
 
Wings10FeetTall replied...
Aug. 15, 2013 at 12:11 pm :
THank you.
 
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nelehjrThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 31, 2013 at 3:12 pm:
Nice love poem, yo! I liked it for the most part, ecspeacially the ending. That was sweet! But in the middle...It gets kind of repetitive...But it makes the ending all the more of a surpise :)
 
Wings10FeetTall replied...
Aug. 15, 2013 at 12:11 pm :
Thank you.
 
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Brownie105 said...
Jul. 21, 2013 at 11:01 pm:
LOVE IT!!! <3
 
BlackndBlue replied...
Jul. 21, 2013 at 11:17 pm :
Thanks, Brownie!
 
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KrasotaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 29, 2013 at 8:07 pm:
DAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW <3 such a sweet poem
 
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 29, 2013 at 8:18 pm :
Thanks, Kras!
 
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Jade.I.AmThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 4:18 pm:
I like the ending the best :)
 
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 4:19 pm :
Thanks, Jade!
 
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waterbendercarorainThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 4:16 pm:
this is really good very discriptive :)
 
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 4:19 pm :
Thank you!
 
waterbendercarorainThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 6:48 pm :
your very welcome :)
 
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newsoulpoet said...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 2:11 pm:
This is really good! I really like how you added some variety in the end, it helps hold the readers interest. Keep up the good work!
 
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 2:16 pm :
Thank you!
 
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chloena_garrett said...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 9:43 am:
This is amazing! :D  I've been thinking of you!!!!
 
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 9:59 am :
Thank you! And, why have you been thinking of me?
 
chloena_garrett replied...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 3:14 pm :
Because I've been seeing your name EVERYWHERE :D
 
dragonsandthree replied...
Jun. 25, 2013 at 4:14 pm :
Hahaha!                                    
 
chloena_garrett replied...
Jun. 26, 2013 at 9:48 am :
I totally get what you meant now when you told me that! But, seriously I can't stop. XD
 
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