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You made me vulnerable

You took a look at me,
Really looked
You could see passed it all,
All the scars that lined my body and defined my ungodly history,
My heart was calloused,
No ability to connect.
To feel.
To even care.
You began to speak,
A spark went off inside me
You asked what hurt,
I stood there unearthed
Naked and cold
I parted my lips and began to unveil all the frail things that impale me,
Nothing I said altered the way you felt for me,
It's unfathomable that I could amaze thee,
You see me as an angel;
Too fragile to touch,
I begin to ramble,
Unraveling the insecurities,
You pick me up and hush me
You tell me I am your princess, you love every piece of me
A tear runs down my cheek as I considered the future you have with me
Lost in love,
I've found hope; so I write you a note...
Elope with me?
I'll be your bride and give you all that's left of me.



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asofnow This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 15, 2013 at 1:09 pm:
NIce. I think you're poem matched well with the picture. The picture is scary D: -ish
 
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Csquared This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 15, 2013 at 11:48 am:
Very nicely put. And I think that message really comes through in your poem. Not many people are brave/strong enough to be like you and not be afraid of being vulnerable. (and by the way, sorry about all the typos in the first comment)
 
hayhaywhaley replied...
Jun. 15, 2013 at 12:58 pm :
Oh thank you! (: I'm glad you noticed. No worries.
 
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Csquared This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 13, 2013 at 9:57 pm:
I think this peice  is really interesting because normally, people become scared when they think they are vurnerable, so they box themselves in and build hemselves up. Bu in this poem, you conveyed a very different message. Bassically the opposite. And so I think this makes it a really cool poem. 
 
hayhaywhaley replied...
Jun. 14, 2013 at 11:26 am :
I was numb for so long and when I became vulnerable I knew that he was meant for. I believe vulnerability is good when you're Writer, I wasn't able to write during that time period. When I met him it opened me up again. People are scared to be vulnerable because they're more likely to be hurt, but I believe in embracing feeling and taking it and making it into art.
 
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