Diaries MAG

May 25, 2013
By GreyGirl ELITE, Pohang,Kyungbuk, Other
GreyGirl ELITE, Pohang,Kyungbuk, Other
170 articles 122 photos 392 comments

Below and deep down,
The sky is still blue,
And there are still weeds to be pulled.

Below and deep down,
I huddle in a boat with no sail,
And watch the birds with gills fly through the sky.

Below and deep down,
It's very lonely.
I was wrong about the mermaids – there
are none.

Below and deep down,
The sky presses down,
And it rains day and night.



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on Dec. 16 2013 at 12:05 pm
mereCat PLATINUM, Horsham, Other
45 articles 0 photos 189 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am finally colouring inside the lines I live between"

Agreed; the last two lines should always be the most powerful and they were, another awesome piece of writing!

GreyGirl ELITE said...
on Dec. 11 2013 at 8:24 pm
GreyGirl ELITE, Pohang,Kyungbuk, Other
170 articles 122 photos 392 comments
Thanks! :D

on Dec. 2 2013 at 1:41 pm
TanviKusum DIAMOND, Gurgaon, Other
89 articles 4 photos 201 comments

Favorite Quote:
All men who have achieved great things have been great dreamers.
Orison Swett Marden

"The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin

we speak in hushed voices so as to not wake our memories

This is a great poem! Congratulations on getting published! :D

on Nov. 14 2013 at 2:08 pm
TargonTheDragon GOLD, Ofallon, Missouri
15 articles 16 photos 292 comments

Favorite Quote:
First dentistry was painless.
Then bicycles were chainless,
Carriages were horseless,
And many laws enforceless.

Next cookery was fireless,
Telegraphy was wireless,
Cigars were nicotineless,
And coffee caffeineless.

Soon oranges were seedless,
The putting green was weedless,
The college boy was hatless,
The proper diet fatless.

New motor roads are dustless,
The latest steel is rustless,
Our tennis courts are sodless,
Our new religion — godless.

i agree with Mckay. the last line is what held me. 

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jun. 14 2013 at 3:43 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

The pic is what captured me the most. I've never seen it before. So...bold. I swear that's what I look like in the morning...but not that attractive. -_- I love the poem. And the disappointment you convey, especially when you realize there are no mermaids in the sea, which is disappointing. I like the two last lines: "The sky presses down,/And it rains day and night." Well done.


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