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May 30, 2013
By east_of_ada DIAMOND, Tomball, Texas
east_of_ada DIAMOND, Tomball, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"As for me, I am a watercolor. I wash off." (via Anne Sexton,"For My Lover, Returning To His Wife")

"I think I made you up inside my head.'' (via Sylvia Plath, "Mad Girl's Love Song")

"You called it cosmic; I thought it was icy." (via Ada Coen)


our life has become nothing more than
those silent movies your mother and your dad used to watch.
but that was before she went crazy
and after your daddy took her away.

with that – our screens are flickers of
blacks, whites and grays
crackles of static going grainy behind us
and there's nothing but the Silence
with the gags in his hands

but it's not like no one cares
and no one can hear our screams,
and no one can see what's behind the grains
and no one bothers to read our lips
and understands our motions.

that grayed-out film is tearing now
and your face is reeling back
as i'm wound up around the machine
and without me there
and without you there
the screen fades to white

but not before it all says
fin.



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on Dec. 25 2013 at 3:42 pm
theatregirl PLATINUM, Lathrup Village, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"To thine own self be true," -from Hamlet, a play by Shakespeare.
"I have sworn on the altar of god eternal hostility against all forms of tyranny over the mind of man." - Thomas Jefferson

From the title to the last line, this delivered!!!!!!! I love it !!!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Nov. 13 2013 at 9:50 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

CONGRATULATIONS!!! So happy for you and my other literary sisters who were published. 

Mckay ELITE said...
on Aug. 1 2013 at 5:31 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I ADORE THIS! One of my new favorites. The emotion and lyrical wording, the imagery and that stunning title—I'm not infauted with this poem. I'm in love with it. I love how you pictured things here like it was a movie. I love old films, so of course I love this. Ada, you're definitely a new favorite poet of mine. 

on Jun. 1 2013 at 8:22 pm
biancaasare BRONZE, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“Basically what we have here is a dreamer. Somebody out of touch with reality. When she jumped, she probably thought she'd fly” ― Jeffrey Eugenides, The Virgin Suicides

absolutely adore this! it would be great if you could check out my poem! feedback is welcome

Beef. PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 1 2013 at 3:27 am
Beef. PLATINUM, Kenmore, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Does my sexiness upset you?
Does it come as a surprise
That I dance like I've got diamonds
At the meeting of my thighs?
- Maya Angelou, Still I Rise

Nothing ends
Nothing ever ends
- Dr. Manhattan, Watchmen

  I'm always a sucker for a good title. But you definitely delivered more than just a kick-butt title. It was a little bit all over the place, but I'm more inclined to like the messier stuff. Loved the little bit about mom and pop, loved the ending, and I loved the over all tone of the piece. Awesome.  

Beef. PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 1 2013 at 3:26 am
Beef. PLATINUM, Kenmore, Washington
29 articles 0 photos 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
Does my sexiness upset you?
Does it come as a surprise
That I dance like I've got diamonds
At the meeting of my thighs?
- Maya Angelou, Still I Rise

Nothing ends
Nothing ever ends
- Dr. Manhattan, Watchmen

I'm always a sucker for a good title. But you definitely delivered more than just a kick-ass title. It was a little bit all over the place, but I'm more inclined to like the messier stuff. Loved the little bit about mom and pop, loved the ending, and I loved the over all tone of the piece. Awesome.


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