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Abrupt. Sad. Pitiful. Beautiful.

May 21, 2013
By SincerelyManon GOLD, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Memories are the only things that don't change when everything else does.

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Your hand
the simplest thing that I hardly even noticed before.
Broken brand
snapping up to greet my eyes again.
Our fingers
touch and I feel blooming flowers spread through out my blood.
That feeling lingers
leaving me with nothing but a tingling feeling left behind.
Your eyes
meet mine again as we float on air and stare.
My mind flies
quickly losing track of all memories except this moment that just passed.
I need to know
do you look at me and feel butterflies soaring through you.
Or do you so
often graze my face and feel nothing but a friend or confident.
Your gun
is better than mine and it always will be.
It's not so fun
being shot down without meaning to be or hurt without purpose.
Straight ahead
i look and search your eyes for something special, warning me to stop.
I lie in bed
wide awake at midnight holding back tears from wanting to know the truth behind our matches.
But now
all i have is that memory of that fading moment when our hands touched.
put me down
just so i can remember how big your fingers were compared to mine: petite.
That memory
jogs my mind like an ever ticking clock that doesn't stop.
Stuck in this reverie
wondering if this is ever going to flutter into the past and stop.
Abrupt.
Sad.
Pitiful.
But Beautiful.

© Ashley W., Port Charlotte, FL

The author's comments:
Some things are abrupt. Sad. Pitiful. BUT also beautiful. Impossible things are the most gorgeous most of the time. so while your dwelling on the downs; turn them into a beauty that you may someday miss.
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SincerelyManon GOLD said...
on Jun. 7 2013 at 11:07 pm
SincerelyManon GOLD, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Thank u!:)
SincerelyManon GOLD said...
on Jun. 7 2013 at 11:07 pm
SincerelyManon GOLD, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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BOOKS ARE LIKE LIFE SO FEEL FREE TO BLAB OMG. and this is a poem about questioning love, yup:)
SincerelyManon GOLD said...
on Jun. 7 2013 at 11:05 pm
SincerelyManon GOLD, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Thank you so much it means a lot!:)
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 4 2013 at 6:49 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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Haha no problem! I mean DUH THEY ARE THE BEST BOOKS EVER!!!
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD said...
on Jun. 3 2013 at 11:27 am
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD, No Where, Florida
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I feel like I can relate to this. You send me through a flurry of emotions during the duration of reading this poem, and I LOVE IT! :D Keep on writing and have a nice day!
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD said...
on Jun. 3 2013 at 11:26 am
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD, No Where, Florida
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DIVERGENT AND INSURGENT ARE LIKE THE BEST BOOKS EVER. Sorry I just felt the need to comment on this XD
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 2 2013 at 7:24 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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Besides the fact that the poem is amazing and your word choice blows my mind: DIVERGENT IS ONE OF YOUR FAVORITE BOOKS TOO!!!!! Okay, sorry, I had to get that out. See most people I know don't even know what I am talking about when I say "Have you read Divergent?" See its like one of the best books ever!! Have you read Insurgent, soo amazing. And the last one is coming out in October. Yay can't wait! Okay, sorry. Back to the poem: awesome job. Question though: is this about a breakup? Because I was reading it and going this has to be about questoning love or a breakup. Cuz you know, the're sad, abrupt, pitiful and maybe in a twisted way: beutiful. Anyway, great job. Also, I saw that you like the Hunger Games also. My friend, you have an excelent choice in books. Have you read the whole series? I can not wait for the second movie to come out!!!!!! Oh and they are coming out with a Divergent movie too!!!!!!! Okay officially the last time I blab about books. Oh and could you take a look at like two of my pieces, anything you like! Thanks. Keep rockin
ephemeral GOLD said...
on Jun. 2 2013 at 6:02 pm
ephemeral GOLD, Park City, Utah
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Dear Lord, I began this innocently and then I read "Our fingers touch and I feel blooming flowers spread through out my blood" and I was completely won over. The pure beauty of this poem is in its intrinsic free verse, with such exquisite diction that I slammed a 5 star rating before I could even finish the poem. Very well written
SincerelyManon GOLD said...
on Jun. 1 2013 at 10:16 am
SincerelyManon GOLD, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Memories are the only things that don't change when everything else does.

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Thank you!
Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 31 2013 at 5:02 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

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The poignancy of the poem is very enjoyable. I love the title too. Gives it some memorable-ness. 
SincerelyManon GOLD said...
on May. 24 2013 at 3:03 pm
SincerelyManon GOLD, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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thank you!:)
sarah98 BRONZE said...
on May. 24 2013 at 2:55 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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awww that was cute :D