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Porcelain monster

May 10, 2013
By xXxPainAngelxXx BRONZE, Alpena, Michigan
xXxPainAngelxXx BRONZE, Alpena, Michigan
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Your face maybe elegant
But you personality is rotten
You’re like the white elephant
That nobody had forgotten
You sit upon a throne
Your porcelain skin shining
Like a bleached white bone
Although your cloud has no silver lining
We can see your imperfection
We see your lips are tied
You told us your confession
And all but lied
And although you claim to be perfect
We can see through the cracks
At the unlawful tale you tried to pass


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on May. 28 2013 at 4:13 pm
haley101 DIAMOND, Windsor, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
“Someone I loved once gave me a box full of darkness. It took me years to understand that this too, was a gift.”

― Mary Oliver

i absolutly love the tittle. it's kind of paradoxical once you read the poem, and that's a nice touch. great job.  

on May. 23 2013 at 3:19 pm
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
“You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who'll decide where to go...”
― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You'll Go!

I do like it and a lot of your imagery. The flow of it had a few kinks, but it just needs a bit of polish :)

on May. 19 2013 at 3:43 pm
xXxPainAngelxXx BRONZE, Alpena, Michigan
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lol thank you kay i really aprecciate it :3

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on May. 15 2013 at 7:36 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I don't like it...... I LOVE IT! FREAKIN LOVE IT! ^u^ Your message is true. And the metahpors you use are alive. And picturesque. Awesome poem.