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Good Morning

April 20, 2013
By Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou


There is something crisp
about this morning
with an azure
clouded-dappled sky
and a honeyed haze.

There is something sweet
about this morning:
the vase of violet orchids
that sits on our nightstand
are fresh and fragrant as
the day last week
when you brought them home
coming back from work.

There is something provocative
about this morning
with the only thing covering
our bodies
are these thin
cool cotton sheets so sheer
that the outlines
of both you and me
must be visible:
our warmth trapped beneath.
You roll over,
thinking I’m asleep,
and get out of bed
without bothering to put on your crumpled clothes,
lying on the floor next to mine,
or without covering your torso
with some sheets.
You bare backside recedes
from my view
as you go out to the kitchen
to brew our coffee.

There is something euphonic
about this morning,
as you get back in bed,
and your voice
is the first sound
to bid me, “Good morning,”
while our steaming coffee
brews in the background,
its guttural song
making it all the way
into our bedroom.
There is something promising
about this morning
with your smile greeting me,
your cheeks dimpling,
letting me know
that I still have
one more day
with you
today.


The author's comments:
I began to develop the idea of this poem in a afternoon. But I decided to wait until the nest morning to write in order for it to have a raw feeling. And this was what I came up with. I have to give MyApocolyptic for being some inspiration for me. Hope you all enjoy.

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Mckay ELITE said...
on Oct. 9 2014 at 5:29 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

hahahaha ;) thank you ray--yo!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Oct. 9 2014 at 5:29 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

thank you, fling!

on Aug. 29 2014 at 10:43 am
Ray--yo PLATINUM, Kathmandu, Other
43 articles 2 photos 581 comments

Favorite Quote:
God Makes No Mistakes. (Gaga?)
"I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right." -Liesel Meminger via Markus Zusac, "The Book Thief"

wow, delightfully graphic, Kay, great work!

on Aug. 28 2014 at 11:27 pm
AugustSummerFling PLATINUM, Mylapore, Chennai, Other
36 articles 0 photos 265 comments

Favorite Quote:
'For you, a thousand times over.' - Hassan, The Kite Runner

A professional writer is an amateur who didn't quit.

That was a beautiful poem with a personal touch! It was a very relaxing read and its simplicity makes it even more amazing. 

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Aug. 28 2014 at 8:02 am
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

This definitely deserved Editor's Choice. In fact, I think it deserves to be put in the magazine. Your imagery is absolutely stunning, portraying emotion perfectly. I could imagine everything clearly; your word choice is descriptive and poignant. Well done, you're very talented ^.^ 

on Aug. 27 2014 at 8:29 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

This is a very sweet poem. Especially the hwo you used the things that most people take for granted in it. All in all, it's amazing, sweet, and wonderful.There's nothing else to say, except thank you for sharing this!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jan. 21 2014 at 12:34 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thanks. :)

on Oct. 2 2013 at 2:34 am
BlackbeltJames GOLD, Reading, Other
14 articles 0 photos 193 comments

Favorite Quote:
Isaac Asimov - "Intelligence is an accident of evolution, and not necessarily an advantage.”

My pleasure, I like reading your work as your a talented writer. The poem also relates very well to those in a loving relationship, so it makes it even more meaningful.

Mckay ELITE said...
on Oct. 1 2013 at 4:42 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

James, thank you so much for taking the time to read this and share your opinion about it. 

on Sep. 23 2013 at 11:59 am
BlackbeltJames GOLD, Reading, Other
14 articles 0 photos 193 comments

Favorite Quote:
Isaac Asimov - "Intelligence is an accident of evolution, and not necessarily an advantage.”

It is a very sweet poem. It does lack a rhythm in some areas, and it can break it up a little, but that is the only criticism. It feels like a very delicate and honest poem, matching the theme beautifully. It is elegant and creates a refreshingly wonderful atmosphere that the reader can really feel. Great work! :D

Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 3 2013 at 5:51 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thank you so much, Olivia. :)

on Sep. 3 2013 at 5:50 pm
Whitehouse503 SILVER, North Waterboro, Maine
7 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
"In the end you should always do the right thing, even if it's hard."

OMG! i love it so much! great work! :)

Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 2 2013 at 9:18 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

So true. Morning are more than just a stage in the day. They're full of beauty that we take for granted everyday. Thank you so much for appreciating this poem. Hope you appreciate mornings a little more after reading this poem. 

Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 2 2013 at 9:16 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

LOL Thank you, dbk101! 

Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 2 2013 at 9:07 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thank you, Tori-gurl. This comment has made my day. I'm so moved to continue to write. I'm so happy someone thinks I have such a powerful affect on them. That's inspiring. Thank you! 

Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 2 2013 at 9:04 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Such a heart-warming and encouraging comment. Thank you so much. I'm touched by your words. 

on Sep. 2 2013 at 8:41 pm
Kestrel PLATINUM, Warrenton, Virginia
29 articles 11 photos 190 comments

Favorite Quote:
-There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy. (Shakespeare, Hamlet)

this is beautiful. Some people just take morning for granted. this poem does not, and i love it. :)

on Sep. 2 2013 at 8:40 pm
dbk1098 PLATINUM, Rockville, Maryland
20 articles 0 photos 41 comments
Wow! I love this! LOL that is all. Amazing sense of voacb and imagery!

on Sep. 1 2013 at 5:35 pm
tori-gurl PLATINUM, Norwich, New York
32 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
smile through everything no matter how bad it gets because it could be worse and if it gets worse well then it can only get better. :)

I love the feel of this poem! You can just sense everything because the details are so vivid and they really make you see the entire experience in a different way than usual. I love when someone is able to make an every day event so poetic. Very well done! :D

on Aug. 30 2013 at 6:35 pm
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Leave nothing but footprints,
Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.

Such a deep and well constructed way of describing, using powerfull words so there is no place for emptyness. Love the artistic, caring way you look at things that most of people take for granted. Good work. (Y)


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