Pieces

April 4, 2013
By Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green


Crash
Hear the shattered glass?
Jagged knives
Cascading
To the barren ground.
Crash
Hear that sound?
It never ends;
The pieces scatter,
Hear the clatter.
Crash
Of the piercing glass.
Ripped in two,
The pressure grew.
Crash
Slicing rain.
Try to run,
Nothing gained.
Crash
Fractured art.
Sweep it up-
Where to start?

Crash

Here lies my
Shattered heart.


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What people may feel after seperation...

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on Apr. 29 2015 at 2:44 pm
AllSoPlayfulWhenYouDemonize BRONZE, Richmond, Virginia
3 articles 0 photos 228 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Our passion is our strength."
-Billie Joe Armstrong

Love this. You're got talent, girl(:

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jun. 19 2013 at 10:12 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Thank you for your AWESOME comment lol

on Jun. 19 2013 at 4:42 pm
ZeroDarkFlirty BRONZE, Eastvale, California
3 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The strength of the pack is the wolf
And the strength of the wolf is the pack."
-Rudyard Kipling

I have but one word for this work, and that word is AWESOME. You have a very developed rhyme scheme (something I have yet to master) and very clever imagery. Great job.

on Jun. 19 2013 at 4:23 pm
TanviKusum DIAMOND, Gurgaon, Other
89 articles 4 photos 201 comments

Favorite Quote:
All men who have achieved great things have been great dreamers.
Orison Swett Marden

"The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin

we speak in hushed voices so as to not wake our memories

I like how you used the words, they created a live image. Love your work! Keep it up!

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on May. 13 2013 at 6:13 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Thanks so much :P glad u liked it

on May. 12 2013 at 8:50 pm
laurengerhard SILVER, South Windsor, Connecticut
8 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am gone quite mad with the knowledge of accepting the overwhelming number of things I can never know, places I can never go, and people I can never be." -Sylvia Plath

I absolutely love, love, love, love, love this poem.

on May. 12 2013 at 5:46 pm
jmitchbb SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
8 articles 0 photos 25 comments
I love the imagery and rhythm to this poem. You are one of few people that are able to make your poems rhyme without seeming childish...Great Work!

on Apr. 16 2013 at 9:01 am
Alex_Writer GOLD, West Palm Beach, Florida
18 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
"In the long run, we shape our lives, and we shape ourselves. The process never ends until we die. And the choices we make are ultimately our own responsibility." ~Eleanor Roosevelt

Your such a great writer!  Loved how you asked questions that kept me reading.  Most poets don't take that risk.  Great Job :)

on Apr. 15 2013 at 4:45 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

Wow this is really unique and amazing i had to re read it like 6 more times

on Apr. 15 2013 at 4:40 pm
mistaken_laughter PLATINUM, Alvin, Texas
21 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are three rules to writing a novel. Unfortunately, no one knows what they are." W. Somerset Maugham

I really like the flow of this piece, it represented what what you were talking about! Great job :)

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Apr. 13 2013 at 9:48 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Thank u, it means so much! :)

on Apr. 13 2013 at 9:31 pm
sleeping-beauty_gurl PLATINUM, Helena, Montana
25 articles 2 photos 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There are none so blind as those who refuse to see"

Wow. There are alot of visual effects here. I love that, this was really well written. Great job!


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