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March 9, 2013
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I have looked through every crevasse
every crack in the ground
trying to find it hoping its safe and sound
looking for it, I wanna find
it is nowhere i have lost my mind

I have spoke my last word i don't no what to say
I'm trying to catch it but its running away
please help me find it,show me a sigh
it is no where I have lost my mind





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Irenie This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 4, 2013 at 2:34 am
Beautiful. A few mistakes, though.
 
LiraDaeris said...
May 1, 2013 at 11:59 pm
Corrections: Crevice Have Spoken Sign I have spoken my last word. Or ; or - It is nowhere- I've lost my mind
 
Night_Star replied...
May 2, 2013 at 5:51 pm
Thanks for the help,But you didnt say if u liked it or not ?
 
samsam said...
Mar. 16, 2013 at 1:30 am
beautiful loved every part of it keep writing :)    
 
director said...
Mar. 16, 2013 at 12:43 am
The best I have read yet!!!!!! the dynamics are beautiful and I can really connect with it !!!!!! 500 stars !!!!!!!
 
Mr.Right replied...
Mar. 22, 2013 at 8:16 pm
thanks so much    
 
theatregirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 15, 2013 at 10:58 pm
I love it, it had perfect rhythm and structure. I loves this, keep writing.
 
xBaByGiRrL22x said...
Mar. 15, 2013 at 10:42 pm
I like the vibe I got from this. It seems connected to the theme of the poem, the idea of insanity taking the place of sanity, of reality. I can completely understand where you are coming from, too. It is truly frightening when you start to question your own grasp on reality. I love this and love how relatable it is. Please keep it up; the powerful emotions you feel will get you far in writing.
 
Mr.Right replied...
Mar. 16, 2013 at 1:35 am
Thanks so much!!!! view more of my work  
 
Dizzily1997 said...
Mar. 15, 2013 at 9:17 pm
It's in depth and beautiful, a few grammar errors but none the less...beauthiful :)
 
pulledheartstring said...
Mar. 15, 2013 at 1:08 am
There are a couple grammar mistakes that can easily be fixed, but overall I do like the idea of it. :)
 
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