I Am Bare

January 24, 2013
By TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown


This is the thread
Simple and ongoing
Thin as hair's breadth
But forever growing

Once it is cut
You're sentenced to prison
Heaven, some call it
To others, it isn't

To some, indeed
It's blank as white
To another, however
It's a rainbow bright

Some say it's a window
Looking down from above
Seeing through skin,
Masks, and all love

Whether, to you,
The walls are color or gray
You look back on your past
With each passing day

You see your trials
All the contradictory
You see your mistakes
And every quiet victory

And in recollections
You remember your past
Your left and right turns
Every move last

Your choice of hands show
Inner reds and blues
The hot and the cold
Your olds and news

While looking upon
Your fondest memories
You reveal yourself
Quite involuntarily

Your mask is stripped
Your filling exposed
You see yourself
No longer closed

Then your eyes fall upon
The mirror, at which you stare
The place at which your mask had been
Is completely, utterly bare


The author's comments:
:) This is about what goes on after death... don't mean to stir up any religious controversy... ;)

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on Feb. 3 2013 at 5:19 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 861 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Thanks! I loved incorporating that illusion.

flanny SILVER said...
on Feb. 2 2013 at 7:40 pm
flanny SILVER, Madison, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"You must do the thing you think you cannot do." ~Eleanor Roosevelt

I liked the allusion to the Three Fates....very clever :)  I also loved the different perspectives that you offered, such as "to some,indeed/ it's blank as white/ to another, however/ it's a rainbow bright. It was very interesting!

on Feb. 2 2013 at 2:20 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 861 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Thanks! I really appreciate your feedback.

on Feb. 2 2013 at 1:11 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Loved this! And trust me, this would hardly stir up controversy:)

on Jan. 28 2013 at 7:15 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 861 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Thanks! I was alluding to the three Fates in Greek mythology who spun, measured, and finally cut the "thread of life." I'm glad you found it interesting!

River22 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 28 2013 at 4:20 am
River22 BRONZE, Penang, Other
4 articles 1 photo 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
The opposite of love is not hate, it`s indifference. The opposite of art is not ugliness, it`s indifference. The opposite of faith is not heresy, it`s indifference. And the opposite of life is not death, it`s indifference. -Elie Wiesel.

~I really like this! It`s so rhyme-y! I`m guessing it`s about the `I` who has died once her thread is cut(the life thread?) Then she looks back at her life. The poem`s pretty deep! Nice! ^^


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