My mind

January 19, 2013
By Nicksamson BRONZE, Bhuj, Other
Nicksamson BRONZE, Bhuj, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"One must not allow the clock and the calendar to blind him to the fact that each moment of life is a mystery and a miracle."
- an old British novelist.


I lie lazily on my desk,
gazing towards the horizon.
I wish to see the red sunlight,
coming from the evening sun,
but all I see are buildings and cars,
covering the horizon completely.

I let loose the power of my mind,
I grant it the freedom to think about anything,
to roam the whole world,
like no one can ever do.

My mind never ceases to miss this opportunity,
from gadgets and automobiles
to plants and animals,
from the beauty of the sun
to the mystery of the ant,
my mind runs like no one else,
if only it had someone to compete with.

But I think it's queer,
that my mind isn't interested
about wine and beer,
for they are for my older days
when my mind would be taking a break.

But that's all I could get out of my busy schedule,
to let my mind enjoy a little.
Now it has to work again,
with tasks that makes him a slave,
which doesn't give him the power of a master.

It makes my mind think about things that it doesn't like.
If only it could be free to think for the whole day,
or perhaps,
it could learn to love things that it does everyday.


The author's comments:
I wrote this after I woke up at an evening and couldn't think of doing anything else. I was half asleep while writing this.

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on Feb. 10 2013 at 11:09 am
Nicksamson BRONZE, Bhuj, Other
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One must not allow the clock and the calendar to blind him to the fact that each moment of life is a mystery and a miracle."
- an old British novelist.

thank u everyone for your valuable suggestions.

on Feb. 10 2013 at 11:07 am
Nicksamson BRONZE, Bhuj, Other
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One must not allow the clock and the calendar to blind him to the fact that each moment of life is a mystery and a miracle."
- an old British novelist.

thank u so much amy ! i appreciate your +ve  criticism. i will certainly take care of it next time.

on Feb. 10 2013 at 11:06 am
Nicksamson BRONZE, Bhuj, Other
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One must not allow the clock and the calendar to blind him to the fact that each moment of life is a mystery and a miracle."
- an old British novelist.

thank you very much! jetta!

on Feb. 10 2013 at 11:03 am
Nicksamson BRONZE, Bhuj, Other
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One must not allow the clock and the calendar to blind him to the fact that each moment of life is a mystery and a miracle."
- an old British novelist.

you are welcome! i like your articles!

on Feb. 10 2013 at 11:02 am
Nicksamson BRONZE, Bhuj, Other
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One must not allow the clock and the calendar to blind him to the fact that each moment of life is a mystery and a miracle."
- an old British novelist.

thanks lawless-flamerose!!  

on Jan. 30 2013 at 9:29 am
Saintz-Flam3Rose PLATINUM, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Do not follow those who follow others for they are only followers themselves.

Nice!! this is pretty cool

on Jan. 29 2013 at 7:35 pm
TheCapturedBat GOLD, Belen, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
If all else perished and he remained, I should still continue to be; and if all else remained, and he were annihilated, the universe would turn to a mighty stranger.
-- Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights

This is beautiful. Thank you for letting the rest of us glimpse your thoughts.

on Jan. 28 2013 at 9:56 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Very, very deep. I love this! The imagery is so intense and it really brings out the emotions you were feeling - even if you WERE half asleep! I love the concept of this, and I think it could be interpreted in many ways. That's the sign of a great poet! (: Graet job.

AmyLeigh GOLD said...
on Jan. 28 2013 at 7:22 pm
AmyLeigh GOLD, Pompton Lakes, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
“One thing about human beings that puzzles me the most is their conscious effort to be connected with the object of their affection even if it kills them slowly within.”
- Sigmund Freud

I really liked the concept of this poem as a whole and also the way to separated each stanza made sense and allowed the poem to flow really nicely. At some points it seemed a little repetitive, especially in the first and last stanzas. You don't have to state the same idea in multiple ways if you've already conveyed it in one. Other than that, I loved the imagery in the poem, good job!!! :)


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