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My mind

I lie lazily on my desk,
gazing towards the horizon.
I wish to see the red sunlight,
coming from the evening sun,
but all I see are buildings and cars,
covering the horizon completely.

I let loose the power of my mind,
I grant it the freedom to think about anything,
to roam the whole world,
like no one can ever do.

My mind never ceases to miss this opportunity,
from gadgets and automobiles
to plants and animals,
from the beauty of the sun
to the mystery of the ant,
my mind runs like no one else,
if only it had someone to compete with.

But I think it's queer,
that my mind isn't interested
about wine and beer,
for they are for my older days
when my mind would be taking a break.

But that's all I could get out of my busy schedule,
to let my mind enjoy a little.
Now it has to work again,
with tasks that makes him a slave,
which doesn't give him the power of a master.

It makes my mind think about things that it doesn't like.
If only it could be free to think for the whole day,
or perhaps,
it could learn to love things that it does everyday.



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Nicksamson said...
Feb. 10, 2013 at 11:09 am:
thank u everyone for your valuable suggestions.
 
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Lawless-FlameRose said...
Jan. 30, 2013 at 9:29 am:
Nice!! this is pretty cool
 
Nicksamson replied...
Feb. 10, 2013 at 11:02 am :
thanks lawless-flamerose!!  
 
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TheCapturedBatThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 29, 2013 at 7:35 pm:
This is beautiful. Thank you for letting the rest of us glimpse your thoughts.
 
Nicksamson replied...
Feb. 10, 2013 at 11:03 am :
you are welcome! i like your articles!
 
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jetta.ckThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 28, 2013 at 9:56 pm:
Very, very deep. I love this! The imagery is so intense and it really brings out the emotions you were feeling - even if you WERE half asleep! I love the concept of this, and I think it could be interpreted in many ways. That's the sign of a great poet! (: Graet job.
 
Nicksamson replied...
Feb. 10, 2013 at 11:06 am :
thank you very much! jetta!
 
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AmyLeigh This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 28, 2013 at 7:22 pm:
I really liked the concept of this poem as a whole and also the way to separated each stanza made sense and allowed the poem to flow really nicely. At some points it seemed a little repetitive, especially in the first and last stanzas. You don't have to state the same idea in multiple ways if you've already conveyed it in one. Other than that, I loved the imagery in the poem, good job!!! :)
 
Nicksamson replied...
Feb. 10, 2013 at 11:07 am :
thank u so much amy ! i appreciate your +ve  criticism. i will certainly take care of it next time.
 
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