Tea and Coffee MAG

January 8, 2013
By Prisoner24601 SILVER, New Malden, Other
Prisoner24601 SILVER, New Malden, Other
7 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"But Brutus says he was ambitious,
And Brutus is an honourable man." ~William Shakespeare, Julius Caesar


You asked if
I took sugar with my tea,
and I told you no.
It tastes too sweet,
too full,
too much.
Why can't tea
just be tea?
A splash of milk,
a tea bag and hot water.
Scalding water: I want
it to burn my throat
as it travels down,
down,
down.

You burn me.
Although the wound
will one day heal,
it leaves a scar.
I drop things when
I'm near you,
like my hot water tea
with no sugar.
I've no sugar left for you
no words,
no smiles,
no love.
You make me feel
so bitter
and lost.

I asked if
you wanted milk in your coffee.
But you like it
black
like your heart,
and bitter
like mine.
The kettle boils;
we stand in silence,
waiting,
watching steam rise.
Then a flurry
of pouring and stirring,
the clink of teaspoons
in your tea-less state.



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on May. 16 2013 at 3:09 pm
ChelseaMe SILVER, Conway, Arkansas
6 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Beauty is an abstract noun

Nice work, I like how it builds from the mundane to making connections to emotions. Well done!

on Feb. 2 2013 at 12:54 am
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Really good:) were you thirsty when you wrote this?

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on Jan. 15 2013 at 9:44 am
XweienX, Shah Alam, Other
0 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be inspired to be an inspiration.

I like how your poem gradually increases in emotions as I read on. This poem requires a little bit of thinking, which makes it even more fun too read. Great job!

on Jan. 14 2013 at 10:46 am
Sparkle1pops PLATINUM, Colorado Springs, Colorado
31 articles 20 photos 343 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No great artist ever sees things as they really are. If he did, he would cease to be an artist."
- Oscar Wilde

Extra super duperly love it! It is so cool how you used drinks as a metaphor for you own life. I feel like this poem leaves alot to be deciphered by the reader. I really like those types of poems! 

3dancer SILVER said...
on Jan. 13 2013 at 1:43 pm
3dancer SILVER, Windsor, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagination will often carry us to worlds that we never were. But without it we go nowhere!"

This is amazing! The descriptions and everything is really good. It almost seems like it's a metaphor for somthing. I like it. =)

on Jan. 13 2013 at 1:06 pm
musixgirl19 BRONZE, Fort Mitchell, Alabama
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
We are all men, In our own natures frail, and capable of our own flesh; few are angels.- Shakespeare, King Henry VIII

This is really good. I like the comparison between you and the guy with drinks. It was really cute. :)

on Jan. 13 2013 at 12:54 pm
Rolledthestone SILVER, Nowhere, Other
8 articles 0 photos 108 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You hypocrite, first take the plank out of your own eye, and then you will see clearly to remove the speck from your brother’s eye." (Matthew 7:5) and "All the poeple who supported slavery were free, all the people who support abortion live..."

First of all, cool pic. Second, ur poem. I think it was unique, I've always liked sugar and milk in everything 9even herbal tea) but that's just how I grew up. But yeah, nice, liked the way you emphasized the differences between you and the guy by using the two very different drinks. Definately interesting.

on Jan. 13 2013 at 12:51 pm
ChobaniLuvinPenguin PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
29 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What makes the desert beautiful is that somewhere it hides a well."
― Antoine de Saint-Exupéry, The Little Prince

Wow! So creative, so powerful! I love it! Great comparisons and metaphors throughout! I especially love the line "But you like it/black/like your heart,/and bitter/like mine." It's funny what you can do with tea and coffee! :)


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