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If Fear had a Voice

January 2, 2013
By StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro


If fear had a voice
I don't think it'd be loud
And if I had a choice
I listen to the sound
Of dry words spilling out
To waft with a cold breeze
But there is a nagging doubt
That I'd not escape the freeze

'Cause who has ever lived say
That they have heard him speak
And is there really any way
To escape the icy peak
That we all feel inside ourselves
When fear is whispering
And who am I to try to delve
Into such mysteries

Still,
If I could speak to fear
I can promise that I would
Just to finally have him hear
That in the end he could
Not stop a few from racing on
And ignoring his sharp hiss
Although his bow is always drawn
With some of us, he'll miss



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on Apr. 13 2014 at 12:32 pm
Rolledthestone SILVER, Nowhere, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"You hypocrite, first take the plank out of your own eye, and then you will see clearly to remove the speck from your brother’s eye." (Matthew 7:5) and "All the poeple who supported slavery were free, all the people who support abortion live..."

Thought the last line was superb. Keep writing. You're a talented poet.

on Jun. 29 2013 at 9:52 am
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

I appreciate the feedback. :) And I agree, "it'd" does seem a bit unnatural, doesn't it? That will definitely be something I take a second look at.

on Jun. 29 2013 at 12:16 am
WrenArrington, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
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I think the only criticism I have is that in the second line, "it'd" just doesn't sound right. It's too abrupt a sound for the middle of a line. That being said, the title really drew me in; it's one of those that makes you certain the poem it represents will be good before you even click on it. There was a nice build up to the ending, which was brilliant and fresh, totally your own idea instead of the cliches some resort to to wrap up a poem.

on Apr. 2 2013 at 5:22 pm
bookmouse BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
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Makes me imagine fear like Cupid or Eros with the line describing a drawn bow. Interesting way to personify fear.

on Feb. 16 2013 at 1:31 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

Thanks so much! I am glad you could relate. :)

on Feb. 13 2013 at 7:56 pm
TheCapturedBat GOLD, Belen, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
If all else perished and he remained, I should still continue to be; and if all else remained, and he were annihilated, the universe would turn to a mighty stranger.
-- Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights

Brilliant! I like the your suggestion that the voice of fear is not loud. The way you characterized fear really rings true for me.