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You liked the wind a bit
too much, perhaps.
Such cold detachment must have been
the closest you had ever come
to love.

I remember when you let your
wispy hair fall forward,
and opened your hand to let pockets of air
drift quickly between your fingers.
You said windy days made life worth living
as you pulled off your scarf to
use as a kite;
a banner of red against cold, gray sky,
sending cinnamon air
through the stars.

I just wanted to tell you, I kept
your scarf and
it still smells like detachment
and stale cinnamon.

I suppose you’re probably much
happier now;
drifting through the sky sounds nice.
resting on the stars must
make the earth feel so small, like the
wind between my fingers or
the red scarf I hold to the sky,
a banner along this
dirt-road runway,
as if cosmic winds could
pull you
back to me.



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In_Love_with_Writing said...
Jan. 16, 2013 at 3:46 pm:
Nice job! Maybe you could emphasize the death a little bit more so that the reader can really feel it. Otherwise, nice job :) Can you comment and rate some of my work?
 
seasons This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 16, 2013 at 6:40 pm :
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. Personally, though, I think the implication is enough---I don't think the 'death' needs to be emphasized in order to produce a reaction for the reader. Poetry reads differently for everyone. :)
 
In_Love_with_Writing replied...
Jan. 17, 2013 at 9:49 am :
You are very right. And since you responded: I absolutely LOVED it. Hopefully you read this.
 
seasons This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 25, 2013 at 7:09 am :
Thank you again. :) I do appreciate it.
 
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MaybeImCrazyButIThinkILovedYouThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 6, 2013 at 8:43 am:
This is just... Sensational. I'm a wimp; I cried at the desktop.
 
roserain This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 6, 2013 at 5:11 pm :
My gosh, thank you! :)
 
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