Cobweb in the Corner MAG

December 9, 2012
By Anansesem BRONZE, Cave Spring, Georgia
Anansesem BRONZE, Cave Spring, Georgia
1 article 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Will our life not be a tunnel between two vague clarities? Or will it not be a clarity between two dark triangles?" ~Pablo Neruda


I was born in a valley next to a river
that runs through a city built on the conviction
that oh, yes, I am captain of my soul
and I am indelible so long as I stand up

I walked through the trees and breathed
in the waterfall
I wandered in the moss and pretended the raven spoke to me instead of the mountains

I left tracks in the sand that were lost in
the sigh of the waves
I looked into a tide pool and told myself I too was a ripple over the glassy eye of a fish

The underside of the market fountain was
a secret grotto
just as the man two booths down was a fairy in disguise
The sound of the city carried the lone
guitarist's strums
They sang the way they did every Saturday
and I wasn't yet too small inside to dance

But, you see, I don't sing so strong anymore
It's been a long time since I really ran
I'm forgetting how to build a castle out of
a cardboard box
and what I have left is my walking shoes
and my pen

There's no use dwelling on what's only
half within reach
Someday my past could be my future
But for now I'll just spin a quiet cobweb
in the corner
and frame my thoughts in dust and
gossamer alone


The author's comments:
This is my very first piece on here. Pleased to meet you! I was attempting to capture myself as I was at around nine or ten years old, and this has ended up decidedly nostalgic. If I was still the outgoing person I was five years ago I would gladly share this with my real-world peers, but I've lost whatever artistic courage I originally had. This is kind of about that.

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on Apr. 27 2013 at 8:55 pm
Alex_Mac BRONZE, Osler, Other
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Favorite Quote:
“Nothing is impossible, the word itself says 'I'm possible'!”
― Audrey Hepburn

I loved how I could could relate to this. It's beautiful, but it also has a sort of melancholy feel to it. Amazing job!

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on Feb. 28 2013 at 7:57 pm
A_____, Columbus, Ohio
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Wow, this is really great!  It might even be one of my favorite pieces I've read on this website!  I love the feelings you convey through your phrases.  Fantastic job!

on Feb. 21 2013 at 7:09 pm
Anansesem BRONZE, Cave Spring, Georgia
1 article 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Will our life not be a tunnel between two vague clarities? Or will it not be a clarity between two dark triangles?" ~Pablo Neruda

Aw, thanks guys! That made my day! :D @StarlitSunrise: well, no, it's not my very first poem, just the first i put on here. But thank you!

on Feb. 21 2013 at 4:40 pm
Maggie99 SILVER, Versailles, Kentucky
6 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I I took the one less traveled by, And that has made all the difference. -Robert Frost

Nice imagery! I can really relate to what you convey here. Growing up is bittersweet. :)

on Feb. 21 2013 at 3:11 pm
Anansesem BRONZE, Cave Spring, Georgia
1 article 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Will our life not be a tunnel between two vague clarities? Or will it not be a clarity between two dark triangles?" ~Pablo Neruda

Aw, thanks guys! This made my day! @Starlit: well, no, not my very first poem, just the first I put on here.  

on Feb. 21 2013 at 2:12 pm
rustyemotions BRONZE, Queens, New York
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
Write hard and clear about what hurts.
-Ernest Hemmingway

Oh how wonderful it was to have that childhood adventure running through your veins. I like your poem. Continue writing, who knows maybe you will be able to coax the child inside of you out of its hiding place with poetry.

on Feb. 21 2013 at 12:00 pm
thatunknownthing DIAMOND, Dubai, Other
67 articles 0 photos 211 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift; that's why they call it the present"

what an amazing piece of writing with antastic comparisns and goof flow. I am though, still trying work out the full depth of your poem! ;LOVE it 5/5!

on Feb. 20 2013 at 6:15 pm
bruisedmemories ELITE, Birdsboro, Pennsylvania
109 articles 10 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you're young, you can fly, but we trip on clouds 'cause we get too high" -The Band Perry (Song: Don't Let Me Be Lonely)
"Cause no matter what, you'll never be alone" -Lady Antebellum (Song: Compass)

This is absolutly flawless. I really loved it! Keep writing!(:

on Feb. 20 2013 at 4:22 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

I really enjoyed this:). Your metaphors were beautiful!

on Feb. 20 2013 at 4:20 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

Wow. If this is truly your first poem, then you are an absolutely amazing writer. You get at a child's perspective very well and were able to convey a lot of emotion. But the thing I really love about this poem is that you used it to say more than just "being a kid's great". My favorite line had to be "Someday my past could be my future". Please keep writing! You have a lot of talent. :)

on Feb. 20 2013 at 4:18 pm
MissExploration BRONZE, Vancouver, Washington
1 article 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
It Can Only Fly When It Needs To.

It's an amazing poem. It puts images in my head because of the way you describe them. Great transitions as well.

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on Feb. 20 2013 at 11:17 am
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 724 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Very good! I enjoyed this. Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! It would mean a lot :) Thanks!

on Feb. 20 2013 at 10:13 am
InsaneRob BRONZE, Lucknow, Other
1 article 2 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
2 sheets of paper(exam paper) can't decide my future! And LOGIC never ends!

Ur work really seems to be professional....well done :)


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