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Everything about you I loved.
How quietly your rabbit hole drank my curiosity.
Your little door of wonders, how it had intrigued me.
Your illusive key, how it kept my mind taunt with frustration.
How your luminous floors caught my tears, until my shoes were flooded.
How titillating your garden of beauties was to my sense of life.
How your ostentatious cat, that disappearing creature, rattled my reason.
How your deck painting roses forced me to meet your horrid queen.
How that foul game of croquet made me think you as bizarre.
Your white rabbit, how he blew his horn of accusations at the start of court.
How you knew my innocence yet still convicted me.
How I stood up and defended myself against your self-centered events.
And how I awoke from your lucid dream of imagination,
How I have longed to dive back into your glorious world.
Everything about you I loved entirely.




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BreeChase said...
Nov. 28, 2012 at 2:57 pm:
Love your repitition!
 
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CorySchoonoverThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 28, 2012 at 2:54 pm:
I love the repitition of "How", I also like your word choice.
 
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TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStringsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 28, 2012 at 2:33 pm:
There are some very stimulating lines in this piece, like "How quietyly your rabbit hole drank my curiosity." And "Your little door of wonders, how it had me intrigued." The repitition of the "How" at the the beginning of every new line also adds to the poetic effect. Nice work.
 
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Nova_Tailleon said...
Nov. 28, 2012 at 9:10 am:
Nice OneEye, saying everything referring to the play and everything. This piece really grabbed my attention cause it is just that awesome.
 
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