September 16, 2012
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I've been watching the clouds fly
I've been listening to the winds cry
I have got to get out somehow
I gotta leave this place
I've been watching the tide crawl
I've been staring at the stars
so small
I have wondered
how they come and go
as they please, that is me,
that is how i want to be
how i want to be
oh, how i wish that was me.

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ToxicAngel This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 19, 2012 at 11:44 pm
Great poem. :) Some capitalization issues, but other than that, all is well. I really like the way you described things to emphasize your feelings, like "watching the tide crawl" and "staring at the stars so small." They just tickle the senses and I love that. Those small yet strong descriptions really help pack the punch in your writing. Good job!
ajl245167 said...
Sept. 19, 2012 at 9:25 pm
Really liked that!
ladybugsrock said...
Sept. 19, 2012 at 6:49 pm
Wow! An overall great poem! We all feel like this sometimes! Please check out some of my other poems as well! Thanks!
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