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I Left Myself With You

September 12, 2012
By brianatetlow GOLD, Cinnaminson, New Jersey
brianatetlow GOLD, Cinnaminson, New Jersey
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I happen to be an eighth Cherokee, that's why i have this dream catcher, that catches about an eighth of my dreams!


I left myself with you.
You watched me from the doorway,
Fingers running along the seams of your pockets and a couple of teeth pinning lips
And I went away, hours and days,
Miles and months.
States knew my name
Streets tasted my body as I went along
Lights and rain, sun and breezes
I made eye contact and never let go.
I left myself with you.
The majority of my being, body and soul, thoughts and eye contact
Stayed tied in the seams of your pockets.


The author's comments:
im not sure how to end the piece, and i had a last sentence before but i took it out because it didnt fit, i just have nothing to replace it with. please leave comments if you have an idea or something to help me end this, or if you like it like that.

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on Sep. 15 2012 at 10:57 pm
JasmineRose SILVER, Bay Port, Michigan
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No expectations, no disappointments.

Beautiful description.

on Sep. 15 2012 at 3:14 pm
Kat_Poetry BRONZE, Neenah, Wisconsin
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"But without the dark, we would never see the stars"

I absolutly loved this! It is such a great poem and it flows very well. Nice job!