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You.
You are sublime.
Statuesque on the inside and out,
a seductive glow illuminates
your body's ivory parchment.
The color of your lips
- like pink champagne,
Warming... Effervescent...
Those eyes.....
Eyes far more engaging
than any felines.
Gossamer threads tangle within your water colored irises.
The hue
-astounding.
...A lemonade stained Caribbean sea..
...Injecting the sun's brilliance into a turquoise crayon...
Your voice,oh, how mellifluous!
Like an emollient,
it softens me
- my mind, my soul.
Every syllable ,
your silky tone,
is spoken with such nonchalance
yet makes my obscene urges
rise above all morals.
Your love; your elixir,
is the finest ambrosia.
Never could one find
something as exquisite...
My heart is but dove feathers
in your beautiful hands.




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TiwazThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 31, 2012 at 5:06 pm:

Overall, I think it's pretty good (although I think love poems are kind of like dreams-everybody endlessly fascinated with their own, but people from the outside looking in won't ever really get it). Two things, though:

 

Instead of "water colored irises", you might think of something more descriptive, such as "cerulean", "azure", "deep-sea", etc.

 

I also think that the ellipses are a bit unnessecary. All of the "...'s" just kind of pull me out of the po... (more »)

 
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Allicat001This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 28, 2012 at 2:57 pm:
Oh my gosh, the imagery in this poem was absolutely amazing and I could feel all the passion contained in this poem... as well as relate to the emotions... You are an amazing poet, keep it up!
 
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waterbendercarorainThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 28, 2012 at 1:35 pm:
amazing poem
 
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